2018/09/26 18:33:15
Wayfarer
This is the one I posted the other day and then immediately took down because . . . well, mostly because my voice was so bad on it. Anyhow, Steve here did some remixing and managed to use something like Melodyne I guess to add some background vocals from my original vocal during the chorus sections, plus he added some piano and woodwinds and whatnot. (Sorry Steve but I took out the Rhodes. For some reason that track just wasn't working for me, and I only used the woodwinds and pizzicato strings in certain sections.) My voice still stinks and always will in this life, but it sounds way better now.
 
The Mind at the Bottom of the Well
 
When I was just a little tike
Training wheels still on my bike
I’d ask my daddy, “What’s the deal,
How do you know what’s real?”
 
He said:
“Sitting in an apple tree
We marvel how it came to be
Life is just a mystery
But aren’t you glad you’re going through with me?”
 
I raise my hand before my face
And wonder how it moves through space
The mind at the bottom of the well—
Maybe he could tell
 
Or write it on the bathroom wall:
“We were never here at all”
The microcosm ain’t so small
The big is small, the small is big, the universe is just a twig
 
Swing a June Bug on a string
Twirl it round to make it sing
Screechin’ out a melody:
“Swinging me into the sky blue, that will never satisfy you”
(Nope)
 
At night before I’d go to sleep
And ask the Lord my soul to keep
I’d bite a few bed bugs cos—
They need to know who’s boss
2018/09/26 23:49:29
msmcleod
Sounds good to me. 
 
And absolutely nothing wrong with your voice - perfect for the song.
 
If you're new to hearing your own voice recorded, it does sound odd (cos it sounds so different from how you hear it through your head) and it's very easy to be over critical.  Just keep singing and recording until you get used to how it sounds.
 
2018/09/27 00:06:48
Leadfoot
Hey Wayfarer, this was very enjoyable! I thought your vocals were just fine. Great finger pickin too! It's a really fun song to listen to. Great job man!
2018/09/27 07:37:13
SupaReels Music
Sounds good to me too .... and I like the title more. Funny thing was that I would have left the Rhodes off too, but thought as I'd done it anyway, I'd leave it up to you .
 
Take care mate
 
Steve
2018/09/27 10:11:48
daryl1968
This is a great song - love it. Is it an original?
2018/09/27 14:44:31
dougk1824
That's a nifty tune - I really enjoyed the acoustic guitar.  I thought your vocal worked well on this song.
2018/09/27 19:28:10
bjornpdx
Bill
I thought the 1st version was fine but the revised one does sound better. The higher notes are
a challenge so maybe use a lower note within the chord, unless that changes the melody too much.
I really like the playfulness of the lyrics. Really good guitar work as usual.


I'm hardly the person you'd want for vocal advice, but this is just from a casual listener point of view.
2018/09/27 23:41:34
eph221
Your lyrics are outstanding.  Good job
2018/09/28 02:37:11
Wayfarer
Thanks everyone for listening. My voice is only good for blues and such, but I like to write all kinds of things, so you may have to put up with it more often if you keep encouraging me. 
 
Yes, I wrote it Daryl.
 
Bill
2018/09/28 06:20:08
daryl1968
Wayfarer
 
Yes, I wrote it Daryl.
 
Bill


Great stuff
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