Hey there Mr Sausage Fingers ...I mean Bill ,
I happen to think this tune is as cool as cool can be .
The guitar part sounds real nice too me ( chord changes and the Recording )
Loved the melodies you used for the songs lyrics ...I thought you were very close in a lot of places ...
At least you have a voice I don't
Keep working on it .
 
Kenny
 

Bill nothing wrong with this, it sounds fine here, I would say there was writhing in agony or torment experienced here with your vocals

Delightful tune.  Your voice is perfect for it.  You sound like a gentle giant.
 
John B.
 
 

It's just a cheap $600 Washburn WCG70SCEG-0 guitar Ken. It's not real responsive (as in you have to really hit the strings hard to make hammer-ons and pull-offs ring out, and slapped harmonics are impossible), but it's got a really nice tone. It actually sounds better tonally than that Taylor 314 I had. I'm saving my money for a nice custom model guitar with a 1 7/8" nut width for fingerpicking.
 
Thanks all.

Nice guitar playing and good finger picking.  Nothing wrong with your voice and we don't hear bass vocals very often.  Nice job.

if anyone ever asks me to give a definition of authentic
 
I would tell them to listen to this
 
 
if only I could play guitar like this
 
 
this is so cool
 
who wrote this?

Thanks Vicente.
 
Jesse, that's the best compliment I've ever gotten. Thank so much!
 
And yes, I wrote it.
 
Bill

Love the guitar, and your vocals sound fine to me. I should use my acoustic guitar more.

First off, cool song. Captures some fun childhood mystery stuff. With a bit of cosmicness.
 
Guitar is first rate. As per usual. I like the piano touches as well!
 
The only thing to polish the vocals a little bit is volume automate down some of the ssss's which get just a tad sibilant. If you turn it up you can hear them. This is very editable!
 
Lastly, kudos on having the mind that could generate this. Totally fun.
 
-Tom

were it not for children, adults would have nothing to live for