I really like the hybrid electronic/organic approach. 
 
The first guitar lead sounded a little thin compared to the other elements in the mix. Maybe add some weight to that lead with a different sim, or maybe just turn it up a bit?
 
The second section of guitar lead(s) had just the right amount of punch! Nicely done.
 
You might consider bringing the drums in earlier at the beginning. That's a long time to make a short-attention-span listener wait for the groove.
 
So you have a track or two of glitchy delay synth (the electronic stuff) and to me that track sounded like it could use some eq brightening at the top end.  The "air" region sounded muffled on just the electronic track. Every other element (guitar bass drums) sounded full of air and breathing nicely in the mix up top. Do you hear a mismatch there? Just me perhaps  :)
 
You are a good tunewriter with serious chops.
 
cheers,
-Tom

I thought it was a nice tune. Sounded real good except I wasn't nuts about the lead guitar tones. They had that direct to the board sound to them. Like you had an amp sim but no speaker sim. There are some speaker sim plugins you can try that might help.
 
Bill

Thanks a lot for listening guys, and for the comments.
 
Tom - wow lots of comments (that's a good thing). I guess the first guitar is "thinner" by choice. It's a higher register, and bordering on feedback. I like the contrast.
As far as bringing in the drums earlier - that's the good thing about not being "commercial"
I don't worry about "short attention spans"
re: the glitchy synth part - that's just a sequenced sample set. it's kind of lo fi - and I left it like that. I think I was looking for the contrast between that and the other parts - so the lack of "air" is probably on purpose.
These things aren't all conscious decisions
 
Bill - the guitar parts are either using S-Gear amps, or the Mercuriall Reaxis (I love this one) - both of these go into Torpedo WOS for speaker emulation. I like to go with alnico speakers, but some of the Reaxis ones go through Mesa cabs. I guess you just don't like the tone of these
There are billions of options

sounded great!  Good one.

Thanks a lot for listening eph!

jbraner
 
 
 I guess the first guitar is "thinner" by choice. It's a higher register, and bordering on feedback. I like the contrast.
As far as bringing in the drums earlier - that's the good thing about not being "commercial"
I don't worry about "short attention spans"
re: the glitchy synth part - that's just a sequenced sample set. it's kind of lo fi - and I left it like that. I think I was looking for the contrast between that and the other parts - so the lack of "air" is probably on purpose.
These things aren't all conscious decisions
 

Well, I'd say that all makes perfect sense! Groovy is the outcome so congrats!

:)