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  • Whenever I'm With You (p.2)
2018/06/28 00:18:58
Johnbee58
Lovely tune.  I think the brass works OK where it is.  If you've ever heard "Wishing You Were Here" by Chicago, the brass closes the song.
 
My only nit is the vocals seem a bit on the bright side.  Maybe either cut them back in volume a bit or cut just a tad off of the high end or mid range EQ. (I am listening on ear buds though).
 
John B.
2018/06/28 05:51:52
RexRed
Johnbee58
Lovely tune.  I think the brass works OK where it is.  If you've ever heard "Wishing You Were Here" by Chicago, the brass closes the song.
 
My only nit is the vocals seem a bit on the bright side.  Maybe either cut them back in volume a bit or cut just a tad off of the high end or mid range EQ. (I am listening on ear buds though).
 
John B.


Yours and the other comments have inspired me to go back to the song and work on the vocals a bit more. Tonight I will fix the rushed sounding lyrics and see if I can improve the vocal blend in the music and use better EQing. :)
 
Thanks for the valuable input Cakewalk peeps! 
2018/07/01 21:20:22
RexRed
Okay, I went back into the song and did a major overhaul.
 
I listened to all of your helpful suggestions here and tried to implement them.
 
I worked on the main music loops and cut some of the bass out and that makes it more transparent and less muddy.
 
I smoothed out the volumes on the lead vocals, dubs and harmonies so they fit better into the music.
 
I used the LP EQ on the vocals and took out some of the screechy textures in my voice.
 
I took out the drums I added in the beginning and now they are only in the chorus part this also made the song less cluttered so it has more breathing room.
 
I have a section after the first few lines I sing where an oboe in one ear and a tuba in the other come in, I took out the oohs and ahhs during that part and they come after and I took the oboe and tuba out where the oohs and ahhs come in. I did the same thing in last verse too. This also made it less busy and cluttered and gave it more transparency and detracts less from the vocals.
 
I aligned the dub vocal a bit tighter with the lead vocal and did a slighty less amount of overall compression in the final mastering.
 
It seems I am never happy with my songs, there is always something more I feel they need.
 
I am starting to work more with reference tracks to see if I can better match what the pros are doing in mixing and mastering.  
 
I have never used reference tracks before and I figured it is time to look more closely at the mixes that are already hits and see if I can approach that level of skill.
 
I hope you like the changes, please let me know if anything stands out and could use some fixing.
 
Click the link at the top of the page, I replaced the song that was there with the new version.
 
or click here 
 
Thanks for listening Cakewalk peeps!
 
RR
2018/07/04 15:01:36
dougk1824
Excellent vocal - the mix sounds professional to me - well done.  I don't know about the brass - not sure it fits with this genre of song, but that's a minor critique.
2018/07/10 22:15:55
stevec
Overall... sounds good!   Your voice is certainly the centerpiece, and that is really well done.
 
I'm not a big fan of the brass either...  For me the song has a folk/country vibe and the brass section seems a bit out of place.   Harmonica probably would have blended well, or maybe violin?  Or maybe even something like a dobro.
 
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