You've definitely got something with this song.  There's a strong melody in there for sure.  The only critique I would offer is that I felt like the electric guitar and the vocal were competing.  Maybe shave a few dbs off the top and see what happens, but that's only a niggle and it may just be my speakers.

 
I agree, good song with a nice groove. Others have given you some good vocal thoughts and as they said it's just a couple of rough patches for the most part. You might definitely think about some "oooh and aahhhh' harmonies floating in the background in the chorus?
 
I did want that elec guit out of the left side and more toward center. If you are going to leave it on the left, maybe try a softer delay of it panned hard right? That might give it more of a room sound and some movement.
 
The keyboard tones, kind of electric and flutey, are standing out for me, nice adds there.
 
The snare has more reverb on it than the hi-hats? I think I'm hearing that. You might match them up a little closer with the reverb?
 
Just some silly mix ideas. I think you have one of those 90% done songs, and I bet it will shine nicely when yer dun.
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 

The song has potential, othesr have covered the things that do not work no point in reiterating them.
Thanks for Sharing.

I like the tone of the guitar on the left and the organ is nice...reminding me of the Shins or something. The right channel seems a bit bare. Maybe some bu vox could slot in there and fill out the stereo spectrum. Or get those guitar fills over that side. Good job. 

montezuma - Thanks for your critiques and giving it a listen.  I panned the guitar fills over to the right - I think it works better per your suggestion.
Wookiee - Thanks for listening.
emaraldsoul - Thanks for your critiques.  I made some adjustments to the rhythm guitar tracks so hopefully it sounds more balanced.  I might add harmonies - haven't decided on that yet.  You mentioned the high hats had less verb than the snare - so I made some adjustments there.  Thanks again.
jude77 - Thanks for your comments and critiques - I made some eq adjustments on the rhythm guitars so the lead vocal stands out more.

Good song...   Nothing to add to the mix comments above, but would reiterate those drum fill comments - some sound as though the drummer wasn't sure what to play. 
 
For the chorus vocals, this seems like a good case for varispeed (for the main lead) and harmonies added for additional impact.   I think the song itself deserves the extra attention. 

I've listened to this song several times, and it just grows and grows on me.  I think it's much better now than the first time I heard it, and I really dig your vocal, even when you're stretching for a high note.  I can feel the passion in this song, which is what makes it shine.  The only thing that seemed out of place was the snare at the 3:40 mark, like it was slightly off beat.  Otherwise, this has a lot going for it.

Lynn - thanks for listening to my song and thanks for you comments.  I'll give that snare at 3:40 a listen.
 
stevec - thanks for listening and for your comments.  I had to look up varispeed - that looks interesting.

I don't judge lest I be judged.

eph221 - Thanks for listening.