Dan, thanks for the feedback -- you know how much I've struggled with vocals, so seeing your feedback is a big lift.
Tom, thank you for the positive comments. I did consciously push the autotune/melodyne a little hard at points. I will try less of that effect in my current project.
Jesse, thanks for your kind words. It is good to have praise from a fellow traveler.
Eph, thanks for listening. I agree the segmentation is a weakness. My songwriting process is mostly sitting down and improvising the next section, so sometimes the moods are distinctly disjointed. My current project is an attempt to take a more traditional approach. We'll see how that goes.