I like it man! Sounds great! You are one of the best songwriters with words that I have ever heard. That's my thing, I am not a singer, I like writing songs. I could make one heavy sound song out of this song if you would like me to?
I enjoyed hearing and seeing you play this, and I'm not perfect myself, but I hear a different direction where the song goes. Send me a MP3 and let me roll with it and I'll send you back something, maybe good or bad and you can add some vocals to it.
Not being a critic here man, I'm just telling you what I hear.
Sounds good man!
Bobby