I could really use you guys to help, I personally love this work but I can't get it right. I don't know whether it's timing, over produced or just me being a bad musician … I've looked at some of your work and I have the gear plus being retired I DO have the time … it's just … well you all know ...but a cry for help is never a bad thing with you lot! ( hold back!! a ha Doh!) many thanks          https://soundcloud.com/us...bsp;   

Hi Steve, this song has a really nice wintry atmosphere, you've captured that 'grey' feeling perfectly. The only changes I would make are to the pay-off lyric; keep to the same line each time, 'everything is grey', and make that heard above the music. The first two instances almost disappear beneath the mix.
 
Good song, with a Sting-like quality.
 

Many thanks I've done this track with different ideas and I agree  ... so I'll do it again with that in mind     (BTW the wife came into the studio today with my 3pm cuppa, and said "Who's that .... I said “Nettlesmith” .. not bad are they? “Early Eagles?” ..(Cookin' In Satan's Kitchen) “Nop, Scottish band back in the day it would seem” …. “Get the album, we'll listen to it in the car” … to you it means nothing, but she has NEVER played my stuff in the car! … just NOT allowed .. Your THAT good LOL

I rather like this because you set the mood of the story very well. I listened to it several times.

I think I would remove the filter sweep thing in the first 15 sec.
The tremolo at 1:40 seemed a bit too much.
Couple of lyric lines seemed too different from the others in the way they were said/sung.
"he doesn't tell the truth"
"they used to love this time of day"
Kind of wondered why the lyrics are in the third person point of view but it works.

I only noticed the above because I was in critique mode. Would not have noticed otherwise. It's a very good song.
Thanks for sharing.

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Many thanks I've done this track with different ideas and I agree  ... so I'll do it again with that in mind     (BTW the wife came into the studio today with my 3pm cuppa, and said "Who's that .... I said “Nettlesmith” .. not bad are they? “Early Eagles?” ..(Cookin' In Satan's Kitchen) “Nop, Scottish band back in the day it would seem” …. “Get the album, we'll listen to it in the car” … to you it means nothing, but she has NEVER played my stuff in the car! … just NOT allowed .. Your THAT good LOL

 
Ha, excellent! (oh, we're both English by the way ) If you'd like a free copy of the CD Steve, just PM me your address.

I liked this a lot. Really great atmosphere, and nicely melodic. I also like your voice - has a great vibe to it, evoked a bit of Chris DeBurg, to my ears, with a slight dash of Roger Hodgeson (in both cases I consider that a good thing). 
 
As you are looking for some constructive commentary, I listened a couple of times and few things did sort of catch my attention and broke the spell a bit. 
 
0:36 - "..ground" is off-key enough that it immediately jumped out at me. I have no issue with some stylish wandering off pitch, but this particular note struck me as too off-key to work. 
 
1:21 - 1:56 (roughly) - I'd really tighten up the playing here. I love the instrumentation, but not everything is tight or in sync. To my ears, the guitar parts are not settling in with the harpsichord sound properly, and they almost sound like they are fighting each other a bit. 
 
From 3:44 to the end, same issue as above. I love the overall texture and instrumentation, and the sound mix is good, but I'd try to tighten up the playing. 
 
Hope you don't mind my honesty on these matters. I think it's a great song, and I figured some honest feedback would be helpful. 
 
Rob

First thing, in all honesty, that strikes me is the vocals...not really 100% convincing...the performance I mean. It's taking a back seat to everything else. Shouldn't it be leading everything? Second thing is the harpsichord giving it an atmosphere I'm not sure fits with the other instrumentation. Lastly, maybe it could use a foundation...a deep bass throughout more or less anchoring and tying everything together. 

Bjorn :-    My thanks for the advice, I kinda like the sweep pad at the start but maybe I'll try something else for an intro, I've got to agree with the tremolo though, never noticed it till now so thanks for that. The whole song was written in a third party perspective so "he doesn't tell the truth" and "they used to love this time of day" is a sort of time out to let the listener into his mind set at those times, but I'll take that under advisement as I'm gonna start from scratch ..ish. Thankyou for the time you spent and your comments they are very helpful.
 
Rob :-    Roger Hodgeson !? What a compliment! (I take that as a good thing too) … Dead right about 0.36 “ground” it is flat! I could use auto tune but I don't like using it much so I'll ditch it and do it again. I think you hit the nail on the head at 1.21 onwards M8, the Harp is out of sync with my awful guitar playing (well the other way 'round actually) and maybe that needs a re-think. I love the honesty and your time for listening and commenting, Thanks a lot

Matt :- Many thanks for listening, there's a whole lot to think about there, so I'll listen to your stuff to get a vibe of what you mean by the vocal taking a back seat bit. I'm thinking it's my skill set that needs a kick. Thankyou for your comments I'll do a bit of head scratching.

Hi,
Cool song,ocean of sadness in it....
For me the song should stand by itself with a somewhat simpler and maybe a little " straighter" musical play-back.
Maybe as if you wanted to be able to play it live with your piano or your guitar.
I think you can transmit emotions to an audience with this tune but( for me) I get somewhat confused with all theese musical informations arriving at the same time.
That is by evidence my personnal point of view with no meaning to pretend to have any understanding of what music is....
Cheers.
Olivier.