I rarely listen to anything on my "pro setup" since it's not online.  I do have a lappy with cans which I could use and do on occasion.
 
Mostly everything I listen to here and in other places is on this computer with the Altec Lansing "came with the computer" speakers. So I compare every mix to the others I hear on this set up.

Good stuff, Star. Unfamiliar with the tune, but the message gets across with your earnest vocal. The stringy thing on the right could use a quick eq cut and some easier release on the keys.

Sounds good for what it is Star, a live performance!!!!!

I liked this too Tim and agree with what Frank mentioned regarding the over-compression. A song like this needs to breathe a little more and not stay so straight like it is now. Meaning, you kind of have this going on __________________________ where it would be cool if it were a bit more ____^^^----------------________ in dynamics, if that makes sense? You can get away with more of the ______________ stuff with a rocker or even a pop tune...but this baby needs to breathe.
 
I actually liked the reverb in this. Tunes like this can have a little more verb like you had it in my opinion. I believe the limiter/master compression made the verb a bit more apparent. However, you always want to watch long tails with reverb. If you want a longer tail, it's best to eq the verb by low passing it a bit so it doesn't hiss like a snake and make it sound like you're using more verb than you really are.
 
You're better off using less tail/decay with a shorter decay and a little more verb level believe it or not. It depends on what you're shooting for. You'd be surprised how much verb pro's use these days. But the key is in how they adjust the decay as well as how well it's eq'd...which is VERY important to any reverb....or any effect for that matter. Nice job on this though....considering how you tracked it. I dig your voice too...nice job! It's also good to see you sharing tunes. You've gotten some really good feedback from everyone so far. Keep up the good work. :)
 
-Danny

Very lovely song with a great message of His love. My only critique is I would drop the keyboards back a bit so those great vocals can stand out better than they already are. Nicely done for such a quick take.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

I've listened to this song quite a few times over the past few days.  It's a good showcase for your live music skills.  Nicely done. :)

Beautiful song, nice performance, good job!
 
best wishes

Good song and delivery.  Very nice vocal.  
 
Rimshot
 

A couple of things could be fixed.  
 
Firstly, the second chord in the progression, D/C# doesn't sound good, ESPECIALLY with strings, because of the b9 interval between the C# in the bass and the D in the treble.  That chord can work if the bass is quickly passing through the C#, but since it's camped out there for a bit it doesn't sound right.  

If you change the "D" in treble chord to an "E" it removes the offending dissonance and it creates a little inner-voice movement.  Here's an MP3 that'll help you sort that out: http://www.audiorecordingandservices.com/chord_fix.mp3
 
The string arrangement needs some work. It needs to "go somewhere".  Why not start with just the low cellos/basses, maybe bring in a single note higg violin line and then finally get to the full texture in the chorus.  
 
I'll also echo the comments of how compressed it sounds.  

Have to agree with all the mix comments noted above but then it is a live take and for that it works well.
 
Thanks for sharing.