Re: Fooling around (music only)
I'm a rebel so I listened on headphones. I think it's got a Satriani-like instrumental potential. Could use a wailing lead of some sort.
I don't hear your arrangement as traditional verse verse / chorus / verse / chorus so you might have some trouble lining up the lyrics. Or not.
It's a really cool set of riffs and I'd like to hear where it's going. Probably could look at a drum fill now and again. Sweet guitar playing.