My first Rock song in years....

Here is my newest project from my home studio.  The song is "Sorrow", and is written for someone I love who is struggling to find their way in life.
 
I've mixed feelings about the two instances of delay I use on the chorus. The first one sounds ok to me but the second...???
 
I am playing all instruments/vocals except drums. The drums are SD using Steve Slate samples
I used Slate VCC, FG-X, Mixbus.
Kush UBK is used on several channels.
Vocal buss is UAD2 EMT 140. Cooper Time Delay
Everything tracked thru ADL600 into Lynx Hilo using V700 for automation and mixing out thru Hilo
 
Master buss last effect is UAD2 Stereo Limiter
Mix checked with RN Digital Inspector and Voxengo Span.
 
 
All comments, suggestions welcome.
 
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I enjoyed this... guitars sound great...  well done...

Hi, Steve,
 
Great song!  Really well written and performed, with excellent vocals and nice guitar work.
 
I agree with Lynn about maybe backing off the reverb on the vocals a bit, and my only other very minor nitpick is that the "bell" sound of the intro cymbal that carries throughout the whole song seems to get a little distracting during the vocal parts.  Maybe a slight volume or minor EQ adjustment to that particular cymbal during the vocals would tame it a little bit and keep the listening focus on the dynamite singing.  Of course that's a just a suggestion based on personal opinion, which is always subjective.
 
Anyway, fantastic song, Steve, I really love the vocals and the tasty guitar solo at the end, very  nice work!
 
Have a good one!
Bob

cool tune. has a unique Bruce Springsteen meets a bit of Bowie w/ some Nick Cave thrown in vibe. think you could mitigate the presence of the bell ride a bit or dial it in at a lower frequency so it 'sits' within the rest of the mix better. 

Nice song. The mix sounds like a compressor is pumping a bit too much especially on the drums. Makes them sound "funny" (not haha funny). I say this because I remember when I used to do this to drums myself.

Good song. I liked the melody and arrangement.. nice sounds except drums need some fix... ride cymbal sounds too loud  for my taste

Great song and great job on this, Steve!   I don't have anything to add to the above comments, I would lower the reverb on the lead as Lynn had suggested (and I'm having that same issue right now on my stuff), and yep, the cymbal issue - VERY slight -  and lower the compression on some other parts.  I can't tell more cause I'm listening with just ear buds at work, but that it sounds even THIS good with ear buds!?  HA!   Well done!!!       ~ John 

Steve, I just listened to the new version a moment ago, and my first impression is that the vocal is either too dry or not quite loud enough.  I wonder if you might consider trying a short delay, like about an 1/8th note on a tempo based delay, mixed in about 15 to 20% just for kicks.  You have a good voice for something like this.  However, the song and arrangement is still way cool.  I think you're just a tweak or two away from a true gem.

I went back in this morning and found a few things...
1. I was using the incorrect drum map
2. Bass compression was distorting
 
I  used the correct drum map and actually changed the  kit to the SSD Sizzle Kit.  The very prominent ride is gone. There are some tom fills now.
I removed the Manley Massive off the main buss.
I removed the Kush UBK from the vocal.
I adjusted the guitar and keys panning.
I added a bit more wetness to the vocal
 
New version up.
 
Thanks for the comments folks!

Hmm.... not using any effects on the drums.  I did mix in some room mic ambience.