My first song in this forum............REMIXED

I like it.... reminds me of the music I listened to in the 70's and 80's.... cool stuff. Some touches of Crimson, Floyd, and others in there.  What we used to call album cuts for FM radio. 

On my computer speakers it sounds good.... overall. The bass was hard to hear but again I'm listening on 2" speakers, and they don't do bass well... I'll listen again on my lappy with cans later.

OK...what I can hear...

The snare sticks out a bit. I'd have to listen on better speakers to comment more on it. 

The guitar solo at 4m is cool. But I'm hearing some high freq disto ..... something sounds "edgy" in the top.....  nice playing and nice tone on it BTW..... 

IMHO I think the vox are a bit to low.. by just a few db. 

It seems to be reverb heavy, but that seems to work well with the song. Especially on the vox. 

Overall, a good song. Looking forward to hearing more from you.

I like this.  Thumbs up from me!

+ + + 1 - - - - 80's vibe

Sounds fine here other than the vocals being a little buried in places some automation on the vox might help.

All in all good work deserves the of approval.

I like this!  love the piano, guitar and bass on this.  really nice!


this is pretty darn good for someone who's so UNTALENTED!!! LOL!

Thanks for all the replies........

@Russ W, BIABDude, & Guitarhacker..... I guess 80s vibe shows my age, could be worse it could be 60s.

@Steve & Wookiee - Thanks very much.

@Guitarhacker & Wookiee - I'll revisit the mix for the 1,000,001st time ... and try and get the vocals a little more consistent.

@tonydean - while I'm there I'll try a little more reverb on the piano (which is from my Roland Sonic Cell BTW). I thought if anything the piano after the first verse was a little buried but I'll pay it a little more attention.

@Purple Rhapsody - Thanks. That re-enforces the comments about drowned vocals earlier.

@beagle - Thanks. This was recorded before I was fully untalented though. I've got much worse now.

The guitar tone is my trusty old JCM600 with a 4 x 10 cab BTW.

I really like it, good mix over all. I only noticed a few small things in spots.
1) the snare rim work in the opening could come up a little bit.
2) the over all snare could come down( as suggested earlier) maybe through automation in sections, may help add more dynamics to the mix
3)the low tom in the fill @ 1:45 sounds a bit overdriven.
4) and this is just my personal prefrence...alittle more "beef" in the low end Bass guitar.

Love the lead guitar tone, sounds close to Slash's Les Paul tone in GnR November Rain.
Nice Job.
Kevin

I just want to say, you got a GREAT voice.  I love it!

Thanks for all the input...........

@Guitarpima. The bass is real although I'd never claim to be a bass player, so you're probably hearing my technical limitations. It's a cheap Peavey something or other that I bought years ago while I was a Guitar Tracks Pro user before I switched to Sonar at V2 just so that I had something to record bass on.

The consensus seems to be the vocal levels need looking at so that's something I'll be looking at soon. EQ is something I'm really still getting to grips with how to use for mix positioning but I understand the theory so I guess I'll get better at it with practice.

Strange you should mention the ending I was undecided for a long time whether to fade or go with the abrupt finish. That's sort of a hangover from playing it live that has stuck.

@PGShadow. I think the very last change I made to the mix was bring the rimshot level down, perhaps I should have left it. It's not often I get mentioned in the same sentence as Slash, in fact I never get mentioned in the same sentence as him. the lead guitar was my old MIJ Squier Strat I bought new in '85 that has twin humbuckers on it straight into a JCM600 through the matching 4 x 10.

@Dreambliss. Thanks for the props.

@ATS - thanks I've not got the greatest confidence in my voice so that means a lot, my voice has always just been a 'means to an end' to me.

@LpMike75 - Vox complimented twice in two posts. I'm flattered. Thanks for the props.

The responses to this song have really given me confidence in my mixing so thanks for that, now I have a ton of stuff I want to re-mix.......

I like this song. Seems to me the power chord attack could come down a bit, and that might clear up the vocals being buried a bit. The lead guitar that comes in towards the lead break could come down a bit could come down a titch until the vocal ends. It kinda swamps the vocal there. Nice work Karl,

Randy

Hey FBB!

I like this song a lot. It's very charming, catching and interesting all the way through and it makes me want to have a beer with a good friend. It sounds pretty good to me. The only thing I'd like to point out is the Hi Hat and cymbals in general. Sounds like everything is going on pretty much the same velocity and end up being slightly drum machiny. A velocity MIDI FX with random parametres would do the trick. And changing between Hi Hat, Ride and Crash for the different parts would add a lot of realism to the drums. Or you could get a drummer to play it. Everything here sounds very organic to me but the tss-tss-tss-tss through out gets a little tedious

Oh, and don't forget to take out the hi-hats and cymbals during the tom fills - it kills the illusion

Vocals sounding pretty good to me. I like that they are placed a little back in the mix. Makes everything sound huge! The kick and snare is nice and the guitars are very nice. Perhaps the bass get's a little dominating over the guitars at times but that's just a maybe. In my ears this track is more or less finished

But come on here, you're just braggin'! Untalented? Dude, you got to work harder on that one!

I like this - very cool.

Not fond of the snare though.

Wow, thanks again for all the replies..............

@ Bob Oister, rsp@odyssey . net. - Thanks I'm def going to look at the vocal levels.

@paulo - Thanks for the welcome, I do wander into the coffee house from time to time and have quite often lurked in here but didn't feel really qualified to start advising others when I find my own stuff hard enough to get my head round. Your comments are pretty much what most people are saying so I've duly taken note and will be revisting the mix when I get time.

@projectM - yeah point about the drums taken. I really should change this on my older stuff, my later stuff I think I've got a lot better at drum progamming on. I've still got the MIDI track archived somewhere but they take a little time to re-record because 99% of my drums are external drum machines. Most of them a Zoom MRT-3 which has some great sounds on it, better than my SR-16 IMHO. Untalented?? Ssssssh I had to work hard to get the untalented badge, IIRC you were posting in on the thread where that happened. LOL

@Rimshot - I'll give those settings a whirl and see what it sounds like. Thanks for the comments.

@Clean - Thanks the snare seems to be attracting several comments, I have quite a tight sounding snare (I think) that I like but that looks like it might be a wrong call from the comments here. Another thing to look at.

@bapu - Thanks. I don't really know where my 'style' comes from, I just write how I feel. I'm actually a huge Stranglers fan (ask stevestrummerUK) but I've only just written a song very recently that even sounds vaguely like them. I guess it's an amalgamation of my very eclectic tastes. Thanks for the bass comment that means a lot coming from yourself. I think I need to reduce the amount of reverb busses I have kicking around a project, maybe that'll stop me getting too adventurous.

I'd just like to say a really big thanks to everyone that has commented. You'll never know how much confidence this has given me in my mixing - I know there's a way to go yet but I now have some where before I had none, so thanks for that. What a great forum this is..........

"I'm never overly happy with the way things turn out".....welcome to the club!

Good progression. Sounds good considering what you're working with.

Welcome to the song forum FBB, I like this track, I really like the vocals, they are really heartfelt and I like the "Look what you've done" that's a great hook.

I don't mind the mix, maybe you need to turn the vox up slighty but it's a preference thing.

I like the lead guitar tone and the solo.

Really great job looking forward to more of your songs.

Peace Ben

There is a lot of low midrange overlap of the vocal, guitar and reverb. I would work on the EQ in that area and I agree with Ed, the bass needs to go down a bit. Where are the cymbals? I hear places they should be but they aren't (well I just heard one, they seem a bit washed out).

Just noticed the kick is a very static and needs to work a bit more with the bass notes. Also there is a lot of stuff in the middle of the mix that could be pushed to the sides.

Those are my first impressions.