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2011/04/06 16:59:31 (permalink)

Need help with a title por favor

Right now she's just been lightly demo'd.
It has the working title 'Old Photo' so far.
Might be to obscure though(?).
Would love to hear some ideas.

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Feel free to critique the song as well if you wish.
It's got a fairly simple structure with emphasis on the vocal(which was REALLY stretching it for me!).

I appreciate all ideas.
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    RobertB
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    Re:Need help with a title por favor 2011/04/07 00:26:08 (permalink)
    I realize this a really raw track, but I like what you've got here.
    I think "Old Photo" fits the message. Melancholy, reflective.
    I get a strong sense of a Metallica sound developing with this. Along the lines of Sanitarium. Not directly of course, but this feels like it wants to pick up on that kind of vibe.
    Keep us posted. I'd really like to hear where you go with this.

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    Re:Need help with a title por favor 2011/04/07 07:55:50 (permalink)
    this reminded me of Def Leppard.... I like what you have started.

    OK...my honest opinion. The song needs a kicking chorus, which it currently lacks. The verse is cool...sets it up nicely, then the pre-chorus starts..teasing me, and making me want more, making me wait for it, knowing there's a cool chorus coming... then the PC goes on too long and the  chorus, the release of the emotion never comes.

    The PC is too much like the verse in it's energy and melody, it needs to start lifting us towards the chorus.

    You have a great start to a killer tune.

    oops...I forgot... you asked about the title. The reason you are asking about the title and not sure of it yourself as the writer of the song,  is because of what I spoke about above. The average listener to the song, on the very first listen should be able to tell YOU what the title is. We expect the title to be in the song, and in a very specific place in the song. Most songs (obviously not all) will have the title located in the chorus, usually in the last line of lyric, sometimes in the first line, but always in the chorus, and generally in a lyrical hook of the song. When you write the chorus, the title will appear on it's own.
    post edited by Guitarhacker - 2011/04/07 08:02:00

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    Re:Need help with a title por favor 2011/04/30 06:39:42 (permalink)
    Hey, that was cool! Well, I thought maybe you could call it "The Longing" if you want to change the title.
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