New Original: Meant To Be - humbly submitted for review

Hi everyone,
I post quite infrequently but always return to this wonderful forum for constructive criticism on my songs. I always learn so much from you all and come away with a better product, so please have at it and let me know what to do more of in this mix and what needs to go! 

The song is at the top of the list "Meant To Be".
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=893653

Thanks in advance,
Paul

Meant To Be

Very, Very Nice Sir!

Thank you all so much for posting.

James - Thank you for the critical listen - I will get to these changes this weekend - perhaps some B3 added to intro and final chorus as well.

Tony - I appreciate your encouraging words.

Janet - Thank you as well - I didn't get very imaginative with the piano part - if you have any ideas and are willing to track parts, I'd love to have your performance on the track.

More opinions welcome!
Thanks,
Paul

Thanks Janet!
 
I wanted to bump this post one time as a "last chance" to collect feedback prior to remix this coming weekend. Thanks again everyone for taking the time to listen!
 
BTW - If anyone can point me to a keyboard player and/or drummer possibly interested in tracking some of my songs, I'd appreciate it! I have many songs that require such assistance: http://www.youtube.com/pauldevillo
Thanks again,
 - Paul

I like the song and the performances but there seems to be a "trebly" sound to it.  Now, that's why I don't do a lot of mix critiques.  I hear one thing one time and something else another.  I think it might be the guitar, 12 string?  Either way, I like the song.

Nice song.  I think you did a good job on the arrangement, you could try varying the verses a lot - the instrumentation seems the pretty much the same in every verse.  You could try experimenting by taking away different instruments in the first verse, add one of them back in on the 2nd, etc., just to add a little more interest.  Nice vocals!

Nice stuff! Cool pop song. I would personally add some effects to the vocals, at least in spots, to add some interest. But it works well as is. Good job!

Thanks everyone for these thoughtful responses. I see the patterns now and will continue to remix with an ear on a fuller frequency mix.
 
Jsaras - I was amazed at the difference your EQ and reverb treatment made. I've never really tried "mastering" any of my songs and I see now that it makes quite a profound difference.
 
Thanks again,
 - Paul

Great tune, Paul, and really well done.  Love the main riffs that run behind the verses... puts in the mind of Mike and the Mechanics' "All I Need is a Miracle."  Good stuff.  I'm not sure I really have crits, so much as my personal take on how I might want to do this.  So, FWIW, here it is:
1. Bring the vocal up a bit in the verses.
2. Add some harmony in the choruses.
3. See how an organ part would sound on the choruses.
4. I liked the little outro, and I found myself wondering what it would sound like at the beginning too.

Just some ideas.  I loved it... great stuff.

jamesyoyo


Great bass sound; what patch is that? It works so well (though I might think about humanizing it a bit, adding a little slop).

You've been listening to me too long James.


Good job Paul.