New Pugtone Tune-"BIG BONED BETSY" (Update 11-2-12)

I'd like to say the lyrics have a deep meaning but..... Mark sent the music and for some reason this is what came to mind.   The old cocoon/butterfly story I guess.  We want to thank our buddy, Scotty Campbell,  for tickling the ivory for us here.  That guy's a trip.  Mark is having surgery so this will be our last song till he gets better.  Quickly I hope!!  Thanks for listening and commenting if you get the time.  All crits and suggestions welcomed.
THIS IS THE UPDATED VERSION, PER THE SUGGESTIONS.  THANKS!
 
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11978169  BIG BONED BETSY 
 
SCOTTY CAMPBELL- PIANO
MARK CLINE- MUSIC, DRUMS, ALL GUITARS
WARREN WILLINGHAM- LYRICS, VOCALS, BASS
 
This is for all the butterflies and the cocoons.

That's a lot of fun.  Cool tune, good performance and recording.  Well done.  

I like the feel of the tune...
but listening through my phones it actually "hurt" my ears..

Nice one!

Cool tune my friend!  I with notnat on this one about the vox...hard to understand some of it.  I wish the bass guitar tone was a hint more defined too... a little mushy on my system.

I think we all knew (know?) a gal like Betsy!  lol

Thanks bud.

Well done, Warren.  The vocal came out fine on my system.  Everything sounded very professional.  Keep on rockin!

Hi guys!

This is my first post from my brand new iPad. 

I'd like to thank the Pugtones for inviting me in for this tune and for putting up with my delays. My new Motif had to be away in the keyboard hospital for an examination, which held up the process. Good luck to you, Mark with your surgery. 

Good job on this one  

The only thing is like what notnat said about the comp on the vocals might help a bit, but other than it's great.
Some of the guitar reminded me a bit of sections from Abbey Road

Frank- Someone PMd me and said they married her!  LOL, NOT!  Thanks for listening!  Mark did tweek the vox and bass.

tbosco- Yeah, we all know betsy but I always ended up with her when she was the cocoon.  Chuckle.  Mark fixed the vox per you and Frank, and he did something to the bass.  I liked the bass better before he tweeked it.  Waddo I know?  I'm just a bass player!

Bapu- Thanks, Ed.  That memory thing messes with me too.  Seems like I was going to tell you something.......

Lynn- You must have the most posts commenting on tunes of anyone in history.  You're a really good guy.  We appreciate you listening and your kind comments!

Starise- Many thanks!  I'm glad you could hear it all ok.  Thanks for listening!

Scotty- It was worth waiting for, buddy!  Thanks.

Makke- Thanks for listening.  We appreciate it!

rm5700- Hey thanks!  I am a huge Beatles fan and your Abbery Road comment is a nice thing to say.  I saw them live twice in Chicago. 

Tony- It was good to hear your new song recently.  Thanks for stopping in and listening.  (whispering)-What the heck is Tom doing in South Korea?   LOL!    I'm sure Mark appreciates your wish for him. 

I love songs that tell a story - nice.

The guitar in the intro seems a bit loud.  Same w/ the vocals when they come in.  I'm just talking a dB or 2.  The mix and instruments are good enough they don't need to be overwhemled.

And on the chorus I'd thin out the BV's w/ a HPF some.  Again, leading but a bit masking.

All my suggestions are tweaks - it is a great song done very well.

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very cool guys - love the harmonies

I love Blues music. Warren this is a great upbeat tune. I like it.

Classic!  Love the flow of this piece.  Mix sounds clean and full. KUDOS GENTS!

Kev

Warren, Mark & Scotty,

Great job guys. Always great to hear a new Pugtone tune and this is a good one!

Best wishes to Mark for a speedy recovery.

Great story Pug.
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