New Tune, New Style for me

And now for something completely different from me:

http://www.soundclick.com/util/DownloadSong.cfm?ID=2497384

Yes I know its a very rough but for an afternoons writing and recording
it's not bad. Sadly the singing's out of tune and the guitar sounds like it's played by a orangutan but I hope the sentiment comes through.,

Andy

I guess the trite cliche is "ship of fools" so this is the I-get-seasick-far-too-easily-so-if-I'm-going-to-be-over-the-water-it's-got-to-be-on-a-bridge version.

That's a pretty talented orangutan you've got there. The playing wasn't spectacular, but also not so bad as you make out. Same goes for the singing - some spots could be improved, but it wasn't bad overall. Biggest complaint from me is the handclaps that start in just before midway through the song. I'm reminded of Sesame Street and the song that goes "One of these things just doesn't belong here..." (Or was that Electric Company?)

The mix needs some work too, like you said it's rough, but the vocals near the beginning are almost completely lost. Even if you are off key sometimes, making it a little more up front it makes it seem like you're doing it on purpose. The way that it is, it's seemingly a mistake that you're trying to cover up.

Actually, some of the singing reminded me of Johnny Lydon (sp?) and he's done well for himself so I wouldn't worry too much about it.

nice indeed. different...but in a good way.

I myself would love to be able to sing....and write lyrics, but i cant get my self passed the embarrassed stage.
well...that and the writing stage to.

this was pretty cool.
thanks for sharing.

it does seem a throwback
we all carry so much genre/history with us

but it also seems very personal and that seels it and makes up for some rough spots
i also like big wide guitar sounds in any context

Mate,
The ending of the song is awesome.
You have to introduce some of those keys earlier.
Said differently: the song is one level/intensity the whole way through. Right at the end you introduce this great new flavor. That needs to be introduced earlier on, and possibly broken down to midway through.
I think you're 60% there: arrangement, arrangement, arrangement.
I like it, but you hear 'bridge of fools' too often. It's an intriguing lyric, so make it scarcer.
And EQ some of those guitars a bit.
My 2cents.

LOL...see? I said (much to my surprise) to drop the electronica too! This is YOU. It's a sound that remains largely unexplored by anyone on these forums and maybe the world is ready for this re-entry into the "rougher-edged" early eighties exploratory rock/punk wave again!

ANDY...I'd love to find a niche like this where it's not so crowded. I think you've found something where you excel AND where you can define something new!!

OR..

Maybe it was a one hit wonder!?LOL.. G'luck mate!

this second one was really nice as well. again, rough, but could be cool with some more detailing. i admit to a bias in favor of this because many of my favorite bands are not pure electronica but more "border dwellers" like all my beloved krautrock bands, stereolab, radiohead, mouse on mars, the fall, tortoise, etc...

despite my list, da has a point. there just isn't enough music like this, and it has an instant aesthetic appeal. real guitars also sound positively arresting in an electronica track.

i am so sermonizing, nes pas?

hey what's going on Andy. Music sounds Great. Very different style than your usuall stuff. It's always good to do a change up. very nice work.

Hey andy,

Interesting departure indeed. Sort of has that early-to-mid 90's Brit-pop full sound, but without being blatantly poppy. I'm not quite getting a U2 vibe here, though the minimalist instrumentation is a good comparison. Your voice seems very fitting to the task at hand. I don't think that anybody likes the sound of their own voice! But others do, so it seems. And it reminds me so much of someone but I can't think of who at the moment.

It almost has a Joy Division/New Order texture but without the gloom of the former. You could have a lot of fun with some Peter Hook bass noodling...


I Would like to hear more from you in this vein of things.


Bradster