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New original song - Abigail
Hi folks Here's a new one that I just finished recording. Hope you enjoy - nits and crits welcome. https://soundcloud.com/skyblueproductions/abigail Abigail Written and performed by Staypress (daryl1968) Verse 1 There was a time, before my prime when friends were hard to come by I must admit, it hurt a bit and made me wonder why Prechorus Before you appeared my life was a mess I was a loner I have to confess Then you found me and opened my eyes I learned to love to my surprise Chorus Abigail, you beautiful thing You light up my day in a wonderful way and never ask for a thing Abigail you beautiful thing There's never a day when you don't make me say 'You make my heart sing' Verse 2 I found it hard to be off my guard - quite a sad existence So in you came to shelter from the rain, the path of least resistance Prechorus Chorus Middle bit I fed you I bathed you i had you spayed You're such a great cat I'm glad you stayed Chorus to end
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/13 18:09:15
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I have to admit I jumped out of my chair when you said *I had you spayed*. haha (didn't know it was about your pussy until then). I don't know what it is about your voice Daryl, but everything always sounds like squeeze, madness, or petshop boys , sorry to pigeon hole you! meow.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 08:44:53
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Cool song...in the spirit of "Martha My Dear".
Overall, the mix is quite good, however, in the quieter sections, the voice high end sounds just a little too brittle. Sounds great when everything else comes in. I'd suggest automating an EQ curve to soften it a bit when things are sparser.
Regards,
Dan
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 09:16:12
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Catchy chorus, nice sparse arrangement, cool vocals plus harmony, very slick modulations right at the end! Yes, with a twist as well.
Your songs always seem to hit the target between quirk and pop - perfectly. Well done again.
My only crits are 1 billion percent subjective as far as the arrangement of things go. For me it was a little too sparse. I'd take your bass notes and let each sustain longer, where you have clipped them. And other times, I wanted to hear a pad sound underneath your vocals (occasionally you throw a psycho space organ underneath, which I quite liked) just to help fill things out. But I can tell you didn't want to fill things, you were going for sparse. Nailed it.
The chord sequence you cooked up here is a fantastic fit for your melody, particularly in the chorus. Cool songwriting indeed, in a nice, distinctly separated mix.
-Tom
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 10:34:02
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Another classic from Staypress, I must admit I smiled when you hit the spay and cat lyric, before that I thought it was about your dog. The production as ever is nice a clear, though I thought the thump (kick) in the opening phrase was perhaps a little to present. The lyric does sound a little fragile in places perhaps something, EQ or subtle distortion or even a pad sound, to soften the top end might help. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 11:10:41
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 15:27:42
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Really like this one Daryl, I have to agree the vocals have a bit too much treble going on with them to fit with the rest of the mix. Although full disclosure, I got some new monitor speakers for my PC just a few days ago, nothing fancy but they have a truer sound as to what I am hearing than what I have been using before so I am happy with them. Sounds great! Just a little high treble on the vocals. Or too much clarity, but I am no mix master so take my words as a grain of sand my friend.
Enjoyed hearing this one, you always have some great songs and performances, my favorite will always be "Damned If I Do".
Thanks for sharing the listen! As for my opinion, I'm just trying to be helpful.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/14 20:51:50
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I have to admit I jumped out of my chair when you said *I had you spayed*. haha (didn't know it was about your pussy until then). I don't know what it is about your voice Daryl, but everything always sounds like squeeze, madness, or petshop boys , sorry to pigeon hole you! meow.
I'll take them as a comparison. Thanks for the listen mate.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 09:49:28
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Excellent Daryl!!
Very pleasant music/lyrics to listen to......I've always been a fan of Staypress!! Mix sound great (listening on my phone/H-phones)....very crisp/clear/well balanced.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 12:12:24
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Good job! I like the song. Like "glad you stayed....meow!"
Sounds great on my PC speakers.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 14:05:26
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Hey Daryl - nice one! overall this seems like it's got to much "sparkle" - the high end is pretty crispy and almost harsh on me ol' dog ears. other than that - really nice stuff........for a CAT SONG! 
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 15:05:49
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dcumpian
Cool song...in the spirit of "Martha My Dear".
Overall, the mix is quite good, however, in the quieter sections, the voice high end sounds just a little too brittle. Sounds great when everything else comes in. I'd suggest automating an EQ curve to soften it a bit when things are sparser.
Regards,
Dan
Thanks for the listen and the suggestions Dan. The current Mrs Daryl1968 suggested making the song about a pet - I think she was feeling a little paranoid. It was almost about a hamster....true story
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 15:35:26
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brilliant. i love the mix personally, and your vocal delivery especially in the verses. great idea too. top notch
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 17:59:36
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Catchy chorus, nice sparse arrangement, cool vocals plus harmony, very slick modulations right at the end! Yes, with a twist as well.
Your songs always seem to hit the target between quirk and pop - perfectly. Well done again.
My only crits are 1 billion percent subjective as far as the arrangement of things go. For me it was a little too sparse. I'd take your bass notes and let each sustain longer, where you have clipped them. And other times, I wanted to hear a pad sound underneath your vocals (occasionally you throw a psycho space organ underneath, which I quite liked) just to help fill things out. But I can tell you didn't want to fill things, you were going for sparse. Nailed it.
The chord sequence you cooked up here is a fantastic fit for your melody, particularly in the chorus. Cool songwriting indeed, in a nice, distinctly separated mix.
-Tom
Thanks so much Tom. I did try and keep it simple but you could be right mate.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/15 23:33:05
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Wookiee
Another classic from Staypress, I must admit I smiled when you hit the spay and cat lyric, before that I thought it was about your dog. The production as ever is nice a clear, though I thought the thump (kick) in the opening phrase was perhaps a little to present. The lyric does sound a little fragile in places perhaps something, EQ or subtle distortion or even a pad sound, to soften the top end might help. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers Wookster. Glad I made you smile mate. I'll have a play with the mix over the weekend but don't tell Bapu as I am meant to be working on a Forum Monkeys song.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/16 20:49:11
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Brilliant! :)
Wow Thanks Kloon :)
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/16 21:02:02
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I have never heard a song of affection dedicated to a cat. Creative, quirky, fun, and well done --- what could be better. I love the sound of the vocals (a bit Beatles-esque) and your delivery of some fun lyrics was very nice indeed!
There is a lot of "sound space" or sparseness in this number but to me that is perfect given the gentle nature of the song.
Great stuff Daryl!
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/17 09:19:53
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Really like this one Daryl, I have to agree the vocals have a bit too much treble going on with them to fit with the rest of the mix. Although full disclosure, I got some new monitor speakers for my PC just a few days ago, nothing fancy but they have a truer sound as to what I am hearing than what I have been using before so I am happy with them. Sounds great! Just a little high treble on the vocals. Or too much clarity, but I am no mix master so take my words as a grain of sand my friend.
Enjoyed hearing this one, you always have some great songs and performances, my favorite will always be "Damned If I Do".
Thanks for sharing the listen! As for my opinion, I'm just trying to be helpful.
Thanks so much. I will fix the treble thing.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/17 10:19:05
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I agree with Beags...highs are a bit "harsh"...
but the song is BRILLIANT!
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/17 10:36:51
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Excellent stuff Daryl, fine piece of songwriting. Like a (and I mean this in a good way) modern day Gilbert O'Sullivan in it's quirky wistfulness.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/18 12:48:13
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Excellent Daryl!!
Very pleasant music/lyrics to listen to......I've always been a fan of Staypress!! Mix sound great (listening on my phone/H-phones)....very crisp/clear/well balanced.
Thanks my mate.
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/18 16:46:16
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Has a nice 'ring' to it.  (oar knot)
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/18 21:41:18
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Good job! I like the song. Like "glad you stayed....meow!"
Sounds great on my PC speakers.
Thanks Jimmy - I chuckle to myself when I hear that part too. Ultimately, I'm only trying to amuse myself so job done I suppose :)
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/18 21:51:42
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You need to sell this to madison avenue for a cat food commercial. :D
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/19 01:41:23
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Great job. The song idea was also very nice and it was sung well and the words were easily understood making it nice to listen. Other performances were also very good. You got talent!
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/19 08:23:11
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The Mrs. Mesh had a good chuckle and enjoyed this track too.......she said to say "good job!!"
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/19 14:33:48
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Yeah, you can't help but smile when listening to Abigail  Great lyrics Daryl. Top production, as expected I must say... A big thumbs up all round  cheers andy
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/19 21:40:56
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Hey Daryl - nice one!
overall this seems like it's got to much "sparkle" - the high end is pretty crispy and almost harsh on me ol' dog ears.
other than that - really nice stuff........for a CAT SONG!
yep, I hear it too - I will go back and de-sparkle. Thanks for the listen mate
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Re: New original song - Abigail
2016/07/20 15:36:45
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brilliant. i love the mix personally, and your vocal delivery especially in the verses. great idea too. top notch
Thanks so much mate.
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