New song - TOO RICH FOR HEAVEN-remixed 1/31/18

Here is my latest opus, recorded with my old friend, Roger Fife, on bass.  I eagerly look forward to hearing from all of you with your helpful comments on this production.  Here is the link:https://www.soundclick.co...ngid=13676989&q=hi
 
I don't know how much longer this forum will be here, but I sure have enjoyed it over the years and have learned much from being here.  I hope all of us has a productive 2018!
 
EDIT (1/31/18): Taking your suggestions, I remixed this today and lessened the compression to give the mix more breathing room and make it less fatiguing.  Thanks for all who participated. 
 
Here are my tongue in cheek lyrics:
 
Some people know how to drive you insane
They say it’s sunny when it’s starting to rain
The sky is falling, and they tell you it’s good
You’re talking clearly, but you’re misunderstood
CHORUS                                                           You can be too rich for heaven
You may be thinking that you know how to smile
Maybe you think you went the extra mile
Look in the mirror, and tell me I’m wrong
We always end up just where we belong
 
CHORUS
 
            I believe there’s a place in the future
            I believe there’s a place in the past
            I believe there’s a place in the present
            I believe that it’s over too fast
 
Just take a place in the back of the line
And, when it’s over I know you’ll be fine
And, if your worries should happen to pass
I hope you’ll be at the head of the class
 
CHORUS  (2x’s)

Great stuff Lynn - love all the quirky synths and your mate did a great job on the bass.

Lynn
I like it. The vocal track is very good as always - you have a great voice. I'm particularly
impressed with the professional production that went into the song.

I like it Lynn! Clever lyrics and excellent singing and playing. I'd like to hear more definition in the drums personally, with a bit less compression and reverb. Also, the synth/organ bell pads are a bit heavily compressed for me, making the overall mix seem a bit "splashy". I like the instrumentation, and the left side guitar picking work.
 
Good one!

Sorry for the late reply, but I want to thank all of you for your responses.  I've heard a couple of times that the delay on my vocal was questionable, so I will take that into consideration.  Also, I've been told that my limiter and compressor may be overdone, so that will be accounted for.  These are exactly the things I was hoping to hear, and I will be busy reworking this mix.  I think it's close, but no cigar, yet.  I want this song to breathe so I can take it off the respirator. 

OK, this is weird, not the song, I just finished litening to Nettlesmith Satan's Kitchen, and then this.
 
I like the way you always stretch yourself, you push yourself.
 
The cymbal work is very nice.  Then lyrics truthful, and the arrangement very enlightening.
 
I need to listen to this again.
 
JQS

So my favorite 7-11 clerk always says goodbye with *don't let the crazies get you* . Is the polite response *they're everywhere* or *we're everywhere*.

Mark, thanks for your response.  I'm starting to like the song, myself.  To be compared to TH is quite a compliment.
 
Jesse, I appreciate you taking the time to listen twice!  The mix has thus far eluded me, but I'm encouraged by the suggestions I've received here.
 
David, I like the second response.
 
Dean, thanks for your time and reply.  I will be tackling this mix again, hopefully, this weekend.  Stay tuned.

Lynn, I love this. The lyrics are just fantastic and the song is nice and gutsy - lots of good emotion.This is a very cool tune my friend.

Hey Lynn - this ain't nothing but cool.  I love the lyrics and your vocals deliver the the lyrics very well (emotion and timing).  I also like that bass track.  I always enjoy your posts and tunes.

This is a good one, Lynn.  Great lyrics.  The drum instrumentation reminds me of DEVO.  You always seem to come up with something interesting sound wise. 

I definitely hear a little 80's new wave as far as the music, but when you start singing it all changes. Great vocals.

Someone above above commented "gutsy" and I agree. It's a killer pop song, with catchy chorus and plucky little guitar riffing in the left speaker. I too also pictured this as in the middle 80's somewhere.
 
I'd add "gritty" and as you have a little crunch on the vocals, you seem to be matching it with some hair on the snare. Soundtoys Decapitator on both perhaps? What is adding the grit? For me, you might lower the grit on either the vocal, or the snare. They compete and make a grit fest in the upper mids. Am I all wet here? 
 
If you listen to around 2:17, the snare drops out completely in a breakdown section. Here, your effected vocal really pops out and there's more clarity. But you need a snare of course. It sounds like youve got the snare panned a little right, and the main vocal a little left. The vocal echo comes in on the right? Where is the snare panned in relation to the vocal echo? MAybe they are crowding each other.
 
Vocal performance is killer and the parts are all there and played well. The drums overall have a very crunched, compressed sound and I'd be curious if a more modern breathable drum sound might do this a treat. What did you use for the drums?
 
Top notch lyrics and songwriting.
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 
 
 

That was different...    60's-electro-pop-rock perhaps?      
 
I kinda liked the delay on the vocals, it gave them a different feel.  Love how things are panned too.   About the only nit I would have is that the kick in the beginning has a lot of "click".   Once the vocals come in it's more masked so doesn't stand out.