New song - That's What Lovers Do - Now with video

Hi everyone!  I haven't been able to spend as much time here as I would like, but I've been listening in the background to the great music here.  I've managed to whip up this song, and I'm now at that point where I don't  know if it's finished or whether I should  keep working on it some more.  Hopefully, you all can point me in the right direction.  Thanks in advance.
 
It can be found here:  https://www.youtube.com/w...0&feature=youtu.be
 
p.s. The bass guitar was played by my old friend, Roger Fife.  Otherwise, the rest was done by yours truly.
 
 
 
 Updated 12/24/16

Nice tune which sounds like it is all there, like Mesh perhaps a little something else either that or a small vocal.

Thanks for sharing.

Great stuff Lynn. Lyrics/vocal are the stand out for me. Really enjoyed it.

The choruses are very strong, and if it were me, i'd vote for taking the whole thing in a Pink Floyd direction. That might require the kind of trippy guitar that I can hear a little of in your ending - but you've got it pretty buried in the mix.
 
And as a purely personal "criticism" which is really nothing more than my .02 cents , I'd rethink some of the lyrics in the verses - not always, but occasionally they verge on some well-worn love rhymes. I wouldn't say much about the lyrics at all, but you kind of asked a "should I continue this" question!
 
And I think you definitely should! Because the chorus chord structures and their melodies are waaaay good. Plus get your Roger Waters thang on, and this tune gets very strong!
 
cheers, good job!
-Tom

This is gripping!  Love the whole piece.  It's glued together well.  I agree with TOM going in the PINK FLOYD direction.  In fact I could hear a david gilmour soaring solo on top of this.  This is the type of subject they might use as well.

I hope those of you who celebrate Thanksgiving had a good one!
 
Tom, it's interesting that you bring up PF because I have often considered going in that direction.  I just don't have those David Gilmour chops.  Perhaps Mesh can help there.  As for the lyrics, well, I sometimes struggle in that department, and I would be more inclined to channel my energy toward my next song.  If you have specific suggestions I would love to hear them.
 
David, thanks for your ears and comments.  Stay tuned.
 
Freddy, I just need a twangy guitar to make it more JB;)  lol  Thanks for your inspiring words, and it's good to be back here, even if only a while.  I've taken on added responsibilities in my life which is why my time is limited these days.  But, it's all good. 

Excellent song Lynn, I like the overall mood, quite dreamlike. Liking the EBow lines and the trem guitar fills too.

Hi,
I really like the way you sing this song which is quite pleasant actually.
I allow me to say that the piano is a little bit knocking hard from time to time and that I'm not totally hooked by the drum part, but it is a personnal taste.
I truely like the vocal part ( except the backgrounds according to me taking a little bit over the beautiful tone of the main part) and I would be curious to hear what a good guitar lead could bring to this song( I' m convinced it will work).
Cheers.
Olivier

Wow ....that is some great composing there. Very nice job Sonar compadre.

Pleasant song. I liked the tune and arrangement. I think the piano sounds just a little bit too loud. Otherwise, mixing sounds good.

I went back for a second listen and, without being coerced, I'd like to walk back my comments on the lyrics - they really are better than my first post indicated. Sorry, I must have been in a hypercritical frame of mind that day!
 
There is a lot of cool instrumental stuff going on that's very thoughtful - nice job Lynn Floyd!
 
-Tom

Makke, thanks for your kind words.  I lowered the volume of the piano on my latest mix, though I haven't posted it, yet.  I just made a video for this song which I will be posting soon.
 
Dan, thanks for your input.  I, too, thought orchestral, but thought that might be over the top, especially since I probably overuse strings in my other songs.  I love Alan Parsons.  As for the distortion, I don't hear it on my end, but if others hear it, I'd like to know.  That's any easy fix.
 
Tom, that is really very nice of you to take a second listen and comment.  I made a video of this which does a better job of making the lyrics work.  It'll be online shortly so stay tuned.
 
Malcolm, thanks so much for your time and reply.  I've made a few minor changes to the mix, but only to enhance a few elements.  You'll hear the change in the video.  Btw, keep up your good work!

Haha, Lynn has a videoblock membership. 
 
Nice song and vid Lynn.

Man... that's just way good!

I used VB on the two Forum Monkeys videos (Happy People and In A Perfect World) along with some stills too. Actually you and I doubled up on some