New song - opinions please

gonzo,
Nice song. It does has good vibe. Like the way the organ came in. Good luck with the band thing.

I like this tune.

Mark

Everyone, thanks for the listen and thoughts on the project.

Maxprizm and DuRod, I too like the ending but have been unable to resolve how to incorporate that into the song more without messing with the vibe of the song. It's kinda funny because when I first envisioned this song in my head I imagined it to be more of a rock song. I laid down the accoustics first to a click track then added some drums by playing my drum machine with my fingers and I came out with the really laid back vibe. Concerning the vocs I asked Danny to sing them kinda breathy and sultry. The vocals, or lack of them is what I need to bring him back for. We ran out'a time and he laid down one track then we had to go our ways. I'll clean them up when I get him back.

Here is the very 1st time I put this track down. While I was working out the riff I was also working out how to switch from a clean to dirty sound using my Mesa Boogie F50. Beause I was trying to figure both out at the same time the recording was very sloppy however I wanted to record it because I usually come back the next day and try to recreate what I did and I usually forget what I have done. I have since bought a Boss BR 600 to use as a musical scratch pad and I love it.

Here is a link to the original time I played the riff.

http://home.comcast.net/~gonzo_dog/Idea_for_a_song.mp3

Again, thanks for the kind words.

ORIGINAL: gonzo_dog

Everyone, thanks for the listen and thoughts on the project.

Maxprizm and DuRod, I too like the ending but have been unable to resolve how to incorporate that into the song more without messing with the vibe of the song. It's kinda funny because when I first envisioned this song in my head I imagined it to be more of a rock song. I laid down the accoustics first to a click track then added some drums by playing my drum machine with my fingers and I came out with the really laid back vibe. Concerning the vocs I asked Danny to sing them kinda breathy and sultry. The vocals, or lack of them is what I need to bring him back for. We ran out'a time and he laid down one track then we had to go our ways. I'll clean them up when I get him back.

Here is the very 1st time I put this track down. While I was working out the riff I was also working out how to switch from a clean to dirty sound using my Mesa Boogie F50. Beause I was trying to figure both out at the same time the recording was very sloppy however I wanted to record it because I usually come back the next day and try to recreate what I did and I usually forget what I have done. I have since bought a Boss BR 600 to use as a musical scratch pad and I love it.

Here is a link to the original time I played the riff.

http://home.comcast.net/~gonzo_dog/Idea_for_a_song.mp3

Again, thanks for the kind words.

This sounds like a much better way to do the song to me. How do you like the F50? I have actually been saving up for one. I have been using a pod xt for a few months and while it sounded good to me at first, after playing through a couple tube amps recently I have come to loathe the guitar "sim" type programs.

Also Durod has a very good suggestion, I think it would pull this song together alot more.

Yeah, John, song has potential. First thing, loose the sitar like sound. I like the idea of starting in acoustic then stepping into an electric guitar on the chorus; not sure you need to go all the way to the Mesa overdrive like you have on the earlier demo. I'd suggest the ending vamp (organ, and on) be previewed as a middle 8 earlier, then the ending will seem more integrated. The singer has potential, his tone is interesting, just tell him to lean into the vocals a lot harder.

Hey gonzo, I liked it. Pretty cool laid back feel. I also liked the sitar and the organ parts a lot, real diverse and fresh. I think everyone may be a little too hard on the singer, I think he may just be the wrong style for this song, but he may get better, to me he sounds like he doesn't know the song well enough yet to feel it out.

Hi Everyone, thank you for the thoughtful remarks and suggestions. Danny, my singer, is coming back in on Wednesday and we'll re-do the vocs. Someone mentioned that he sounded hesitant and that he wasn't familiar with the song. It's funny because we were litterally laying down the vocals line by line as we created them. Whoever noticed that those are some good ears. Also I was the one who asked him to sing breathy. I'm thinking of bring a female singer in to sing in unison or a duet. We'll see how that goes.

I'm not prepaired to re-do the track like I did in my original demo as some had suggested, yet.... But I do feel the track was a little repetative so I added some sonic filler here and there to break it up. Someone mentioned to bring in the organ theme from the end to the middle of the song but it really wasn't flowing so I brought in the power chord instead. Also added some echo guitars. The changes don't really start until the second verse.

Here is a link to the new version. http://home.comcast.net/~gonzo_dog/I_Want_More_2.mp3

Again, everyone thanks for the listen. I promise not to post another version of this until the track is complete.

Thanks again,
j.g.

No eq used whatsoever but some some multiband compression

Again, there is no eq applied and the gains on the compression bands were relatively flat. I was there when it happened....

ok, then it sounds perfect.

Sorry, had a bad night last night, fighting some kinda bug. I came into work today and played the song on a system with a subwoofer and I hear it now... ' didn't hear it on my system or my car last now but there it is now.

j.g.