New track (now new version)

Now I have put online a newer, hopefully better version of Malibu Mae(silly name, but I never come up with good ones for some reason). Comments still welcome and appreciated. Still not ready, but I will probably finish it at some later time.
 
https://soundcloud.com/madrigal7/malibu-mae-2
 
 
 
This is my newest track.I mixed with my Grados as I don't have access to my monitors.I would welcome some comments. It is not ready but I felt a need to send something. There are 2 different choruses in it and the first one is accidentally a bit worse version of the chorus that I meant to put in. I am now in a place where I do not have access to a working computer but when I return I might put the other version online also to be listened to.

https://soundcloud.com/madrigal7/malibu-mae

That's a nice sound, reminds me of OMD in places. That top line synth melody gives it the feel of an instrumental version of a vocal - might be worth writing some lyrics for this, the melody is all there and strong enough.

Thank you guys for the very nice comments and suggestions. I wish I knew someone who could sing this stuff but no such luck. I am glad that the mix sounds good, although I do not know why it is good. I do not know what OMD. I do not know how to make lyrics although I have only tried once. It was for a song that I meant to send to a song contest.

Thanks Tom. The contest was called Syksyn sävel and the songs that participated to it were easy listening type of music I think. There is lots of contest songs on Youtube if you are interested. The song contest was replaced by Popstars and then came Idols. I was not qualified to enter the contest as it was participate by invite. I forgot that rule, but I was not brave enough to enter any way. It was a silly dream that I would participate the contest.

Thanks for the info James.

I enjoyed the track, if your looking for suggestions I love drums so maybe some tom fills higher up in the mix? Is that you singing in ther background??? -Shawn

Nice melody on this one Kakku. Mix turned out well.
 
Regards,
Dan

Thank you guys for your very nice comments.

Thank you Gus for your nice comment. I do not know any singers who could sing this. Also I think that writing lyrics is difficult.

Thank you Steve. I try to add some more drum stuff, making some other changes as well.

Very pleasant. I agree vocals would add much, in lieu of that the development and variations would give it a bit of build.

I think it is as much the chord progression which I am hearing and unfortunately many songs have very similar chord progressions.  This is why it needs a more developed melody line or some other ear candy to centre the ears on.  If my furry brain can put a name to the tune then I will come back to you other than just remember in western notation there are only thirteen notes always a good excuse.

Thanks for the comments guys. I have tried to finish the tune but it is not easy to me. I will probably put out the new version tomorrow and leave it at that development stage until some day I know what to do with it.

Thanks for the comment Tim. I believe the arps you mention is the nice Z3ta+. The drums I often don't do well enough. It is the same old drum loop I always use.

sounds great