Newbie - Need Mix / Master Guidance

Below is a rock song I composed.  It sounds unpolished or amateurish.  I did minimal mixing.  Is there any obvious issue I can address to make it sound better?
 
Thanks.
 
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First off, your playing on this tune is quite good.  The chord progression goes in directions that aren't predictable, so kudos there.  The drum solo is interesting.  Was is live or programmed?  I have no major problems with the mix.  It seemed balanced on my system.  But, as foxwolfen said, it is a bit unfocused.  If you want it to be an instrumental, it could be pared down a bit.  Shouldn't be too hard, just leave the audience wanting more than less. 

I don't think the mix is the main issue here, but if that's what you want to work on then try this. Find a song that is similar in instrumentation and style to yours, then do an A/B comparison on your monitors until you get a grasp on what's going on. Try to get your mix as close as possible to the one you're comparing to. Listen to each mix in as many different environments as possible until they start to sound alike. If you already do this, then disregard. You have a world of potential here, so good luck.

I agree with lynn. The mix is not the issue, nor are the instruments. You will find the sound you seek when you focus more on the composition. Don't give up. Its a good start. You have some good elements already.

hatflyer


 i should have called it jam session.  i got new virtual instruments and wanted to put them to the test, though still attempting to make it a worthy song.  will work on it.

I would have to call this a fruitful jam session.  You're getting some great sounds from your new instruments, and there are several themes in here that just beg to be developed.
I'm getting kind of a Yes flavor from some of the bits in this.
As the guys have said, just focus and run with it.
This has tons of potential.