No Way Back

great stuff Ms Lampshade - very creative and quirky.
'Dirty dreaming chocolate cream' - I think I may have been there last time I was on the Atkins diet :) 

You have very distinctive style which is all yours, I really like this.  There are elements of the Bonzo Dog Doo Dah Band to your music which is nice and quirky.  Thanks for sharing well worth a .

This is a great song!  My suggestion would be to turn up the drums.  Your voice is so strong and clear that you can make the drums the second loudest element without taking anything away from the total.

There she goes again being one of the most original "characters" in this sub forum.
 
Loved it.
 
If that's your bent you could be Tom Wait's wife or at least musical collaborator.

Very cool and creative tune, Laura.  Almost had a 40's feel to it... very original with extremely clever lyrics.

Awesome! Loved the intro.. I was thinking this is nice... then the tune started. I smiled.
Really a fun piece.

I'd get some variety on that snare pattern, and bring the bass up a ton so it can counterpoint things.
 
Now the good stuff - it's a great song with great lyrics, very cleanly sung, vocals at once hushed yet out front - simply superb mixing there! And your chord changes are inventive in a genius-like manner. Which would be enough, but you add such awesomely idiosyncratic melodies to them, and then the sublime vocal phrasing.
 
Each listener wants something different but I'm finding I'd like your rhythm section work to come up to the same level as the rest of it. Not too flashy, just more in keeping with the overall genius tone! Right now, for me at least,  your incredible originality is being supported by a drum machine, like a QY-20 or an Alesis SR-16, with one pattern employed.
 
If you were a band, I'd fire your drummer, cut the bass player's pay in half, and take you directly to Hollywood or Nashville or New York, which I think is where you are already, so nevermind.  :)
 
So that's just my .02 but thanks so much for sharing and do keep it up! Really great songs!
 
-Tom
 
 

Just a bit twisted... I love it! :)
 
 

jamesg1213 Thank you very much for listening to the song and for your kind commentary.
 
No, I don't play out. I wouldn't know how to go about it, and I'm sure nobody would want to hear me. You're (this forum) the only people who've ever been subjected to my nonsense. Most of my family have never heard me play a song. And I guess they're showing their good taste! :) So, heaven forbid I should ask strangers to listen. It's a lost cause. But something made me start posting here. Maybe so I can think I did something in my life. Ha!
 
 

Laura
You're blessed with a unique voice and you know how to use it. I really enjoy your music, the kind of story telling technique you have with the little pauses here and there. I wish you the success you deserve.

Cactus Music, Thank you so much for those very encouraging and thoughtful comments. They really gave me a lift!

LJ
P.S. You're oh so right about going overtime! I know I'm guilty of exceeding average song length all too often and really need learn to pull out the pruning shears :)

My first and perhaps most important comment - I was not disappointed.  
 
I can only echo the sentiments above which I've used before as well, your unique style shines through on this one.  The interesting chord progression + melodies + clever lyrics, the quirky arrangement, the pauses for effect, and the airy yet strong vocals... it just works.   And this one does have a bit of an old time "French" feel to it for me, if that makes sense.      But I am curious - who has been a naughty boy?   

11Dreams: Thanks for that good cheer :)
 
eph221 and bjornpdx: I want to thank you both for your continued support and encouragement. Your words mean a lot to me, and I sincerely appreciate your kindness. 

This is great stuff from start to finish. I couldn't stop smiling when listening to this. The mix can be better, and the drummer... but it doesn't matter when listening to a unique song with a brilliant arrangement.

Lj - I've told you in the past that I'm a fan - this just solidifies it for me. This tune sounds like it comes from a different era - Kind of like that song - Those were the days my friends, I hope it never ends . . . - you're just flat great.