One Love Awaits

https://soundcloud.com/hummingbirdcinema/demo-8-27-16
 
This is sort of a downtempo, chillout prog rock tune.  I am still toying with some of the vocal passages, so if you have areas that should be re-recorded, I am all ears.  It is still not mastered, so the mix still needs the rough edges rounded out a bit -- but I think it is in good enough shape to share at this point.
 
Hope you enjoy it!
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updated version here:
https://soundcloud.com/hummingbirdcinema/one-love-awaits-demo-9-6-16

It has a wholeness to it, a real sense of completeness of the parts. Nothing is really out of place, with a lot going on! 
 
I immediately thought PG as well . . . 
 
mix thoughts? It's pretty good as it is. I might try a version with less delay on the vocal, and one with the snare turned up a tad. The French horn? toward the end could be another timbre, it's the only thing I could pick out as "not real" - maybe it's too washed with reverb to retain any attack of the notes. I know horns are pretty impossible to make sound real unless they are . . . real. But it's not much of a drawback as is.
 
I wasn't sure about the ending scrunchies . . . does this lead into another piece?
 
very well done!
-Tom

What Tom said...
 
In addition, I think there are a few places that could use more cinematic feel in the drums, like "big" toms. Everything feels very polite, maybe too polite.
 
Overall, this is very well done and something to be proud of.
 
Regards,
Dan
 
 
 

Thanks Dan and Wookiee.  I am still revising it so I'll try to do some changes in the toms.  Dan, if there are any specific passages that should be 'impolite' let me know.  Appreciate the feedback in any case.

This is one of the best songs that I've heard in this forum for quite a while.  It's ethereal and rhythmic at the same time.  I've been listening to this several times a day for the last week, and it never gets old.  Extreme kudos to you.

Nice textured piece.

Cool! It got this mesmerizing effect on me! It might be what you have done with the vocal.. I really like it a lot!

Hi Biodiode,
Thanks for listening.  I added much more harmony in the second instance, and maybe more compression.  Fiddled with levels a lot.  Kind of losing track of all the changes.  Glad it improved!  I'll probably take one more pass at it before mastering, so we'll see.
Thanks again.
 
Hi Frugaard, appreciate the comment.  It has taken more time than I expected.
Cw

Thanks Dan, you were right about just listening to where the drums needed more pop.  Good advice.

It is a combo of electronica and good old fashioned rock for me.  I like it!  At first I was just expecting electronic stuff but the vocals entered quickly and I loved it.  Good tune, buddy, and well played and produced!

This is a beautiful piece, and more importantly to me, endlessly interesting. There's really a lot to listen to here. Your second mix really takes it up a level too. The only thing I'd add is that there were times in the song that I would have enjoyed some real passion, or maybe attitude in the lead vocal. Still, it's a wonderful piece of work!