Pat's Waltz

I wrote this for a fan of mine from Canada. She and her husband drove hundreds of miles to see one of my shows. 
This is just a rough draft of how I wrote and arranged the tune. Before it goes on my next album, it will be redone from scratch. Let me know if you think it's worth keeping and any suggestions are welcome. Thank you for your time and ears. 
https://soundcloud.com/stringjammer-1/pats-waltz 

Nice recording, and boy, can you play that fiddle!
 
I'd say keep it, though it reminds me of a lot of different things I've heard back when I lived in Texas. A good, strong melody would raise it to the next level and make it stand out.
 
Regards,
Dan

Yeah, not too shabby for a rough draft.   
 
I think it's a keeper.  I liked the breaks you've thrown in, as though they're meant for dancers....   I'd definitely be curious to hear the final version if this is just a draft. 
 

Bapu,
Thanks! Appreciate your ears. 
 
Dan,
Thank you very much! So you think the tune lacks a melody? 
 
Wookie,
Thank you, my furry friend. So, bass too much/too loud?
 
Steve,
Thanks! I shall indeed keep it and work toward a final draft. I'll keep you "posted". LOL
 
Rikkie,
Thank you, and yes, I double-tracked the Taylor in the guitar break.

This might do well on A Prairie Home Companion.
 
Super nice feel to this. Performances seen very solid . . .
 
How would it sound with a bass that is more upright/acoustic-y? Just wondering.
 
Perhaps an echo of Dan's comment about a melody - your piece is great as is, but having just listened to it, I can't really recall what the melody was. I'm probably missing out but I don't know if I felt a "hook" in there - I know this is not Justin Bieber music  so maybe the performances stand on their own.
 
The Ken Burns Civil War music is in the same vein but for some reason, perhaps because of the abundant repeition of a particular theme, sets the hook. Maybe it's the "trills" in your melody that hide the melody, to my ears, OR that you have a ton of themes going on.
 
Your piece is remarkable (listening for the second time now) in that it invokes a Mariachi style, and a Austrian beer hall style, and it's the same tune. I don't know if those were any influences to you.
 
At 3:20, right at the end, a little mistiming of the guitar I think?
 
The middle guitar section was very well recorded, as is the piece generally.  
 
 
I'm just picking nits, really. Nice tune. You clearly know what you are doing here . . .
 
best,
-Tom
 
 

Scott the bass was just a little to present not so much to loud as to much, it really rumbled the room.

Hang on to this one, Scott, this is a gem.  I look forward to hearing this when it's complete.

I could listen to this all day! Very soothing and uplifting at the same time. You can really hear the joy in the music.
The playing is clean and warm and human and very natural and musical in its feel.
 
Very enjoyable - I look forward to many more.

very nice Scotty - a fun tune from start to finish.
Mix is excellent.