Raybans

First song I've ever written and actually finished.  I played all the instruments except the violin.  And had two friends sing.  I listened again just before posting here, violin needs to come up and backup VOX down in a few spots.
 
Anyway, any critique is welcome,
 
Thanks, Keith
 
https://soundcloud.com/keith-young-16/raybans-master
 
Better I hope.

As noted it is a nice tune and sounds to be well performed.
 
From a production perspective it is quite noisy with quite a notable hiss it is also unbelievably quiet.  Normally on soundclod (miss spelling deliberate) I have their volume slider at about halfway but this I needed it up full and still you did not light the -24db leds on my 01v.
 
Thanks for sharing I am sure a few tweaks on the mix and a little mastering will bring this together nicely.

Thanks guys, I appreciate the advice. 
 
John, Cut or boost?  Too much mid range?
 
I'm trying to get rid of that hiss.  Seems to show up once I've bounced all the tracks into one then run it through Izotope.  I can get the volume but the hiss gets louder.  I'm going back to each track individually tonight and see if I can may isolate it that way. 
 
Keith

Thanks BBB.  I'm pretty proud of the song itself.  Found the hiss.  It was the Tape Emulator in the X3 Producer Pro Channel.
 
Anyway, here's another mix.  Hope it's better. Keep that advice coming.  (Maybe too much verb on the drums?)
 
https://soundcloud.com/keith-young-16/raybans-iii
 
Keith

Yep.  Just listened to it in the car. Waaaaaaay too much reverb on the drums.  For some reason it doesn't come across that way on my studio monitors (Yamaha HS7's.)  The hi-hat is panned 100% left.  Maybe like 75 or so?
 
Thanks for the props!  It'll get there!
 
Keith

Great playing and singing! The mix issues can be fixed. You have a really good song here!

Very quite, but nicely played, good voice and most important...a good song.

Put up a new version in the original post.  Hope it sounds better to you guys.
 
Keith

Thank Bill.  I've got some others I've written off the same experience this one came from.  I'd like to start the next one soon!!
 
Keith

Yup... good song as Scotty said, the mix is easily fixed.
 
Hiss can be a result of recording levels being low and them trying to turn it up later with software gain.
 
I had to have the levels on the player all the way up as well.   I also record country music, and using rock drums is par for the course today in Nashville.  When you get the mix under control, the drums will be fine.
 
This forum is a great learning tool. Post your stuff, ask questions and you will get some great advice on how to do things better.  
 
Great first time out of the box....

This mix is much better overall nice tune, still a little on the quite side.
 
Thanks for sharing again.

This is most excellent sir!!  You have a very sincere quality to your voice.  I like that.  The lyrics are very good.  I listened to both versions.  The "Master" version is a big improvement on the original.  The original was way to compressed.  There is still some noticeable compression on the acoustic guitar in the new mix but I like it because it brings it to the forefront of the mix.  I like the background vocals.  The girl singing has a beautiful voice and I like the point-counterpoint thing a lot.  Nice bridge and stop before the finish.  It's a really well thought out composition in my opinion.  Looking forward to hearing more from you Keith!

Well, whoever did what, I like it a lot.  I'm not just saying this.  I mean it!  Did you write the song Keith?  

Well, that's just it.  YOU wrote the song.  Without you there would be no song.  Whoever sang what and did what is immaterial.  However, the singer IS very good!  

Keithr41
Starts to sound really bad after that point.  Any thoughts?  Pointers?

Not without seeing the mix, if you understand, the only thought that crosses my mind is that something in the conversion chain is lowering the overall volume.  What do you use to convert to MP3?