River Flowing to the Sea

https://soundcloud.com/orygun/river-flowing-to-the-sea

Kind of a Leonard Cohen song I suppose.
What I really wanted was just two tracks, a vocal track with a guitar strum accompaniment.
My voice isn't so good though so I added in a couple more accompaniment tracks.

I appreciate any comments. Thanks.


When I was younger
The story was told to me
The story of a  river
Flowing to the sea

Miles and miles of water
from mountains far away
Returning  to the ocean
Starting over again


Through all the changes in my life  
One thing is never ending
The river keeps on flowing

When I was younger
I stood on the shore  
It told me of the journey that
Began long ago

It  carries me onward
Past changing scenery                  
I don't see the changes
Happening to me
 
And though the days are forgotten now   
The river remembers the man
As the child who understands

Below the distant clouds
I'm now able to see
The vastness of the ocean
It lies before me

The current moves faster
The course is straight and true
It carries me onward
There's nothing left to do

And the river flows  to the sea
The child waits on the shore
He's seen it all before

Hi Bjorn,
 
It was a lovely song, with deep and meaningful lyrics.
 
Regarding your voice, I'm wondering if it would help to try and "project" it a bit more, be more forceful, if you like. It sounds like you are holding something back. I appreciate that this particular song may require something more subtle like this but it might be worth trying something different. See what comes out...
 
 
cheers,
 
andy

Lovely, gentle song Bjorn - I love the way you haven't forced the vocals.
The reverb may be a little dark for the vocal. Maybe take some bottom end of the reverb?

Beautifully mixed and performed -- the guitar sound is great.  Very heartfelt song very well done...
 
Allan
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Good song and performances. Cool.

Very nice song, Bjorn, almost pastoral.   I also get that "holding back" vibe from your vocals, though at the same time I do like the airiness.  If you're lacking confidence in remaining on pitch I wouldn't hesitate to give Melodyne a spin.   Heck, I use it all the time on my vocals.   

Kakku
Thanks for the kind words.

JamesG1213
Good idea on putting the vocal up front.   Usually I try to hide the deficiencies with a loud accompanying track.

SteveC
Thanks.  Actually I have Melodyn on speed dial - I have to use it all the time on my vocals. It helps a lot, but can only do so much.

Freddy J
Thanks so much for the comments. I appreciate it.