SONG: Blooming

My 2nd song. Mix is Rough (compressed Eq'd Drums. Bass). Have not mixed it. Truely appreciate any advice/feedback I can get on the mixing process that might help me going forward.

Specific feedback I would like:

- Guitars /Bass a bit boomy?
- Should I thicken the guitars during the riff (Add a track of chords?)
- The drums feel like they don't contribute well to the rythm. Do you agree? Maybe add a couple of double kicks and steady the snare a bit.
- The lead guitar pieces may need to be doubled?
- The piano piece towards center seems boomy, what to do?
- How far away am I from having a good Demo? It is only my second song and it represents the best of my ability at this time. How far to go to have a worthy Demo?

The song I began writing/recording around November 2004 elections. It is about George Bush.
Translation key: Sun = Nukes (weapons) = (Bush - the Son).

Here it is: http://www.beatkiwi.com/music/blooming/blooming.mp3

Cheers
Kiwis

Dam. Out of tune again? Can you tell which part? I do not hear it. But someone else said the same thing about my last song. I wonder if my tuner is not correct. (Using Pod XT to tune) I will get another. Both songs were done with same set of strings perhaps that was the problem? Bad strings? Maybe it is my playing. I bend just about every note when I play. Do I need to rerecord the whole thing?

ORIGINAL: Abbey

I haven't listened to the whole song yet because I just got called away to supper. I'm have a cheese-burger with lots of onions, so please ignor my bad breathwhen I come back and have a chance to listen to the entire song.

Jeff Abbey

Wow! That cheese burger with an entire slice up onion was "Jack Cool".

"Jack Cool" --- A term I picked up from a kid from Manhatten.

ORIGINAL: kiwisdontdrinktea
Dam. Out of tune again?

Forget my last post because I'm a big, big, dumby...
What I'll do now, (before someone else does it and makes me look like a massive dumby),
is just cut the out of tuned sections and shoot 'em back at ya.

Jeff Abbey

ORIGINAL: kiwisdontdrinktea

Abbey The tempo is 122 bpm. I hope you are hearing some disonance due to bends, if that is the case it was intentional and I am happy.

Ahhhhh, let me listen again tomarrow with a fresh ear.

If you were to listen to my first instrumental [Black Tree] you'll see that I have a tuning problem the openning guitar and a couple of other places. I may just be, today that is, a little sensitive to intonation because of my problem with my mix.

Catch you on the flip-flop DUDE,
Jeff Abbey

Kiwi,
Your developing an interesting style. I liked this tune.
Here some comments:
- Regarding tuning - there's a bend by the lead/right guitar at 0:06 that isn't fully executed and it just makes the axe sound outta tune. This should be addressed or Dan's going to get on your case. If you want to bend it, bend it with conviction! <g>
- That same guitar - at 0:20 there's a hammer-on trill that could be crisped up.
- Personally, I'm not sure about the R2D2 stuff coming in at 1:00+, may make it more subtle, less volume.
- Theres a lead guitar line at 2:43, played high, repeated an octave lower - that third note needs to be played a half note lower.
- I second Mike Lockett's comments (by in large)

You're moving forward with your compositions, this one has more structural integration than the last (which was cool too).

Hi, kiwis!

This was a fun listen. I probably don't get it, but it was interesting in an oddball, quirky kind of way. I notice in your various posts that you claim to not be a musician, not be a recording or mastering engineer, and etc., so what part do you play in these? Just curious.

M

ORIGINAL: kiwisdontdrinktea

Abbey The tempo is 122 bpm. I hope you are hearing some disonance due to bends...

Just listened to your song once again that is logged on my iTunes program. I am now finding that the disonance bends, lyrics and vox fit splendedly[check spelling].

Thank you all for your feedback and suggestions. I will spend some time mixing and trying to improve the mix this week.

Abbey I listened to your instrumental Black Tree as you suggested. Did not see a post for it so I'll comment here. Nice guitar playing. I wish I could play like that. If it were my song I would probably add another guitar part, create a conversation between two guitars. You seem to have no trouble playing so it could really create a vollying groove there.

Mike Will bring Piano down, and also vox down in the electronic section'. I will double the leads probably by cloning and running the clone thru Guitar Rig. The guitars certainly have a direct sound. I think I shot myself in the foot when I scooped some mids out of the POD before I recorded it. Oh well. Thanks for the ears.

Ed As usual your ears are pitch sharp as a leprechauns on St Pattys day. I wonder if I can use a plugin to pitch correct it? I did pump up the R2D2 (radio Moscow) right before I uploaded it, I'll bring it back down. Thanks for the sanity checkl.

M Love Your 'Jazz' collabs. The song is me on guitar, vox and midi everything else. I try to warn people I don't have much experience with this, so they can weight my comments (about their songs) appropriately.

Kev(electronica) I know what you mean about the lyrics, I wanted it to be a bit obscure so that it wouldn't sound like some guy whining. I'll see about correcting the pitch problem.

I will also be adding a couple of kicks and one more bass note to make the riff seem less choppy.

Cheers and thanks again for the valuable comments.
Barry