She's Devine (She's the Bomb)

You have a great piece here.  Your voice works well for this type of Blues.  I love the musics move into the first vocals around 0:28.

The song is great as is.  We all arrange differently due to our preferences and influences.  Please understand that my thoughts are not critiques, just the sharing of ideas. My thoughts:

1) get rougher with your vocals.  I can tell your vocals can do it.  Each section of melody starts similar.  Mix it up and work more tension towards the end.
2) Like Stevie Ray Vaughn, put more licks into the melody section.  The guitar sound is good and should contribute more.
3) Maybe walk up the scale into the solo sections so you feel the drive leading into the big lead guitar.
4) Don't hesitate to take the vocals above the current register.  Start a section an octave higher then work it down while singing. This technique fits this style well.
5) Blues can have a dead silent spot between a transition.  A silent spot can kick well into the next section as long as you hit the next section's beginning hard.
6) You could modulate.  

Man, I like the song.

Regards,
Lance 

EDIT: Clarified that my thoughts were ideas only, not critiques.

Hi Lance, 
Thanks for the feedback.  I will try upping my vocal delivery.  Good input.  I appreciate it.

Freddy J: I checked out Lazy Lester thanks to you.  Thanks for the post. 

Rimshot

Cool song.  You could take all the suggestions in the world, but this would still work.  You can always start a new song.  Songs can take on a life of their own once you start fiddling with them.  I look forward to hearing what you consider to be the final version, then I will be able to make a better response.  Good start.

Ya, I'll get Jason on B-3 if he's not busy.

Rimshot


Need solo guitar

ohgrant

Warren, thanks for the offer and kind words.  Can I take a rain check on the the bass?  

Lynn, thanks much for the encouragement.

Bapu, I was hoping you would be up for another one!  Jason and Jubilee's help is always welcome.  

Malcomb, WOW!  You are very kind.  This song just fell out of somewhere (I just don't know where) and I am so glad you like it.  

very cool guys... great job so far...

I only wish my finished mixes would sound as good as your drafts. Really like your vocals on this piece. I'm kinda getting a ZZ TOP vibe.  Looking forward to hearing the finished piece  KUDOS!

Kev

Tanks Jubilee, maybe next time!  I love your vocals.

Hi Warren, can I call you Pug? Thanks again. 

Kev, much thanks.  I try to do everything like it was ready to mix so I appreciate the comment.  

Eric paul, thank you.  I hope to have this one done soon.  

Thanks to all.  It is really cool to come home and find so much support for an idea.  It makes life sweeter.  

Rimshot

Great dance tune!!!  Sort of a hip-hop blues weld.

RMS levels may be a bit high for radio or theater play ... but this seems perfect for skating, the dance floor, and/or driving.

I like where you guys are heading with it.  Based on the system I am currently listening on I won't comment on the mix though it sounds pretty good to me on this little system.

Jimmy this is great - love it.

Ok, now I get back to work to finish this song.  Thanks to all.  

Rimshot

Guitarpima


Very nice tunage! Reminds me of CCR with better vocals.

I think the bass is a little to loud. Just a bit though.

Well done.

Wait until he gets my bass track with it's automatic "make me louder than everything else" virus in it.

jamesg1213

Rimshot


Thanks much Jamesg1213.  The numbers 12 13 are significant with me.  Do they mean something do you that you can share?

Nothing very interesting..back in my band days I used to get bored checking the mic's with 'one-two, one-two', so I'd say 'one-two, one-three, one-four-and-a-half....'

Ya?