Shimmering All Around the Water Was

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2017/12/30 09:34:58 (permalink)

Shimmering All Around the Water Was

A song I wrote awhile back and only recently finished :
 
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    jamesg1213
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2017/12/30 12:30:01 (permalink)
    Nice melodic song Bert. Don't hide your voice away in the back there, it's fine.

     
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2017/12/31 13:33:36 (permalink)
    Agreed the vocal could easily come forward in this fine mix, thanks for sharing.

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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/01/13 07:39:01 (permalink)
    Wookie and James : Thanks for listening and I think you are right- I'll get take another stab at the mix and repost soon.

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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/01/13 11:57:44 (permalink)
    By the way Bert, I know you don't come around very often, but in case in this forum disappears there's an alternative that Bapu set up.
     
    http://beyondcakewalk.com/forum/index.php

     
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/01/13 19:36:07 (permalink)
    jamesg1213
    By the way Bert, I know you don't come around very often, but in case in this forum disappears there's an alternative that Bapu set up.
     
    http://beyondcakewalk.com/forum/index.php


    jamesg1213
    By the way Bert, I know you don't come around very often, but in case in this forum disappears there's an alternative that Bapu set up.
     
    http://beyondcakewalk.com/forum/index.php


    Thanks for the heads up, James. I will check it out.



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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/01/21 04:29:55 (permalink)
    Vocals were a little too front and center to my ears.  Like the song regardless.

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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/02/17 08:06:10 (permalink)
    David,
     
    Thanks for the comment on the song- its an unusual and personal of tune for me, and I had no idea how it would sound to others. 
     
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/03/04 23:26:17 (permalink)
    I tweaked the vocals a tad.
     
    http://www.soundclick.com...73&songID=13601214

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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/03/04 23:39:13 (permalink)
    I think there is a good song in here, I like the phrasing of the lyrics, and it's got a catchy chorus.
     
    Your lead vocal sounds like you sang it twice, doubling it, which is fine. I thought I heard areas where the first take and second take were fighting each other a little bit. Like a consonant landing at a slightly different time in each of the takes. 1:20 area
     
    So you might just slice and dice, or volume dip the one you like the least just at that point.
     
    What effects are you using on your vocals?  I think you could make some gains there. How about an eq with everything below 250 or 300hz rolled off?
     
    Moody Blues-ish it is, cool  deal. 
     
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/03/05 00:47:21 (permalink)
    Have to agree there’s a really nice, well crafted modern pop song in there. Well done. My humble critique FWIW is that it’s hidden behind the wrong production approach. Bring it forward, it’s a great song hiding behind overly spacy, effectived vocal and instrument sound choices. (YMMV and all appropriate disclaimers yada , yada, yada...)
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    Re: Shimmering All Around the Water Was 2018/03/08 13:26:31 (permalink)
    Good job -I enjoyed your song - I liked the vocal double.
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