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2018/10/29 19:20:12 (permalink)

Slice of Paradise - new original song

Hi forum folk
Here's a new song I wrote and recorded with the aid of a very nice solo from James (jamesg1213) Griffiths.
Nits and crits welcome
 
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Slice of Paradise
Written and performed by Staypress
Guitar solo by James Griffiths
V1
We've been a couple for so long
I forgot whats right, whats wrong
You've been selling me out
Fear uncertainty and doubt
Prechorus
...and I don't know why you get so defensive
You've got me going on a charm offensive
Chorus
Why upset the apple cart? We've got so much to give
We've got our little slice of paradise to live
V2
I used to be one in a million
You used to be so brilliant
You've got a prize for me
A medal for mediocrity
Prechorus
Chorus
Middle bit
Though we no longer love in the same way 
We show our love every single day
Chorus to end
 
with added fud
post edited by daryl1968 - 2018/10/29 19:52:15
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/29 19:34:33 (permalink)
Love this song, thanks for asking me along mate

 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/29 20:22:10 (permalink)
As always, consistent, catchy, and brilliant.  You two work together so well, you'd think that you were in a band.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/29 20:34:09 (permalink)
This is neato!  I was expecting a little more testosterone in James's solo, but it suits the song fine.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/29 20:37:35 (permalink)
Really well done. It’s so upbeat and catchy that the only thing that strikes me weird is the line “though we no longer love in the same way”. Not sure what that means and it’s none of my business, but it seems like a bit of a buzz kill. Maybe, just maybe I have totally taken this all wrong - would not be the first time. Good tune, terrific playing and singing.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/29 21:34:00 (permalink)
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It’s so upbeat and catchy that the only thing that strikes me weird is the line “though we no longer love in the same way”. Not sure what that means....



Oh, I totally get it. Every marriage or other romantic relationship grows a little cold over time. You still love each other, but it's not the fiery kind of love you once had. It's more refined for some when they realize there are more important things than romantic love such as trust, loyalty, and selflessness. For others it's not that at all but instead becomes more of a love of circumstances, a comfortable home life. It's fine--just different.
 
Good song guys. Well done.
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/30 08:02:44 (permalink)
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Love this song, thanks for asking me along mate


Thank you for your valued contribution mate
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/30 16:50:26 (permalink)
Nicely written and arranged, well captured and performed, excellent choice of tone from James on the lead.

All round  great track.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/30 23:18:29 (permalink)
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eat the whole thing
 
crust and all
 
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/31 14:15:16 (permalink)
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As always, consistent, catchy, and brilliant.  You two work together so well, you'd think that you were in a band.




haha - thanks Lynn. I really appreciate it mate
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/31 15:45:09 (permalink)
Nice work, sounds good to me...
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/10/31 20:31:36 (permalink)
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This is neato!  I was expecting a little more testosterone in James's solo, but it suits the song fine.

Thanks David.
I have to agree, James' solo is perfect for the style.
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/01 03:47:08 (permalink)
Chorus kills. So very catchy. Middle-aged ennui. Raise your hand. Everyone? Yes, I thought so.
 
James, excellent feel on that guitar as per usual.
 
Spot on, I'd say.
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/01 16:45:59 (permalink)
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Really well done. It’s so upbeat and catchy that the only thing that strikes me weird is the line “though we no longer love in the same way”. Not sure what that means and it’s none of my business, but it seems like a bit of a buzz kill. Maybe, just maybe I have totally taken this all wrong - would not be the first time. Good tune, terrific playing and singing.



Thanks for the compliments - Bill (Wayfarer) has the meaning spot on. It is meant as bitter-sweet
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/01 17:29:43 (permalink)
Thanks for the nice compliments guys 

 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/01 18:08:40 (permalink)
Daryl,
 
Fantastic track.   Sounds current but with a hint of an 80's nod in the drum track (i.e. synthetic cowbell and general sound)   Like it very much. 
 
Cool guitar solo as well.   Reminds me a little of David Gilmour.   
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/02 11:34:13 (permalink)
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It’s so upbeat and catchy that the only thing that strikes me weird is the line “though we no longer love in the same way”. Not sure what that means....



Oh, I totally get it. Every marriage or other romantic relationship grows a little cold over time. You still love each other, but it's not the fiery kind of love you once had. It's more refined for some when they realize there are more important things than romantic love such as trust, loyalty, and selflessness. For others it's not that at all but instead becomes more of a love of circumstances, a comfortable home life. It's fine--just different.
 
Good song guys. Well done.
 
Bill


Thanks so much Bill - spot on with the song meaning sir!
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/02 14:46:30 (permalink)
Catchy tune in a laid back style, just the way a song should be.
I like the "medal for mediocrity" I have a trophy case full of them.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/02 15:36:46 (permalink)
This is great.  It has the whole package -- good lyrics, catchy hooks, solid instrumentation, and the vocals are a good match with the tune.  Like the hot ending. 
 
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/03 01:25:02 (permalink)
Daryl, you most definitely have your own sound.  All of the songs I've heard of yours have something in them that links them together, sound wise.  That's what I love about the great Burt Bacharach.  You know from the first bar or two that it's a Bacharach song.  Yours are becoming that way too.  Not saying all of your tunes sound the same, but are in the same style and same overall sound.  The Staypress Sound.  Be proud of it.
 


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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/03 01:28:10 (permalink)
Enjoyed hearing this one very much! The Vocals are right in front of you and easy to hear. That's not always the case in a lot of songs. But what I really like, while the vocals are right in front, you can still hear everyone else also. I'm no mix master that's for sure, but I like what I hear with the mix. 
 
Even more so, I love the song!!! 
 

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/03 22:56:29 (permalink)
Love does mature in different ways but still can be there.  This is nothing but a terrific number.  I tried really hard to come up with a crit. but just couldn't find one.   Parts of this song remind me a bit of Brazil '66 and I love them.  You two have really put out some great songs but I would put this one at the top of the list.  Excellent!!!
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/04 13:19:32 (permalink)
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Nicely written and arranged, well captured and performed, excellent choice of tone from James on the lead.

All round  great track.


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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/05 11:14:52 (permalink)
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pie
 
eat the whole thing
 
crust and all
 
 
paradise pie
 
top echelon you


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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/05 16:00:25 (permalink)
Really clean mix. Cool song too. Like the middle bit where it drops to just bass and synth for a minute.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/06 17:45:02 (permalink)
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Nice work, sounds good to me...
 


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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/07 18:50:28 (permalink)
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Chorus kills. So very catchy. Middle-aged ennui. Raise your hand. Everyone? Yes, I thought so.
 
James, excellent feel on that guitar as per usual.
 
Spot on, I'd say.
 
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Thanks so much Tom.
I agree on James solo
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/07 23:00:49 (permalink)
Great work, mate! Every sound is a piece of art, dipped in saturation and mixed together to an quirky master-piece (pun embedded). Catchy chorus with the portamento synth following the bass living it up. Great playing as well, James! Lovely transition from wild west solo back to the chorus.

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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/08 21:02:44 (permalink)
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Daryl,
 
Fantastic track.   Sounds current but with a hint of an 80's nod in the drum track (i.e. synthetic cowbell and general sound)   Like it very much. 
 
Cool guitar solo as well.   Reminds me a little of David Gilmour.   
 
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Thanks a lot Mark - very kind
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Re: Slice of Paradise - new original song 2018/11/10 04:21:25 (permalink)
Great song, great guitar solo, what's not to like.
 
Good Job!
 
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