Supermarket Girl

Not sure what to make of this one....

Key lead is overwhelming. Can't make out the drums other than the snare. The Jim Morrison thing kinda works.

Has some cool elements, but needs a remix to make it work for me.

And why would anyone fall in love with a girl who's, ahem, always on her knees? That ain't the kind of chick you fall for.

Thanks for listening guys, James, yea not my best mix I had trouble with the drums because it was a stereo recording straight from the electronic drum kit.  I should have used the transient shaper, didn't think of that until you said the drums are hard to hear.  As for the guitar I use to have a Creamware Pulsar card and when I first recored this track way back in 2003 i used the amp sim that came with the card.  I now use GR4 and I can't get the same fuzz tone that I got with my Creamware card, that amp sim was the bomb but no excuses, I should have probaly worked on the guitar tone a bit more but it does growl in places.
 
And since both of you have made comments about the lyrics, the lyrics are actually a tripple entendre, yes it has the dirty smuty element which you guys have picked up but the lyrics are really about how working at the stupermarket is like prostituting yourself.  You might as well give it away for free the amount of money these people are paid, ok perhaps I am just trying to make it sound better, I don't know but when I was writing those lyrics I def had in mind the irony that some of these "girls" do indeed look like prostitutes yet they are making only $20 an hour so hence giving it for free. 
 
Peace and thanks Ben

Thanks freddy, yea I am a child of the seventies although was never much of a zappa fan, this was me trying to meld a little of King Crimson and T-Rex and the croon over the top of it which some have said sounds a little jim morrison like. 

Thanks and Peace

Thanks Metaltek, it's nice to get compliments and yes I did intent the bluntness.  It's amazing what you come up with whilst wandering the supermarket eiles.

Peace Ben

The mix is kind of shocking as the dissonant instruments dominate.  I bet it is intentional, and it is certainly different than most mixes around.  Yea sure, some supermarket girls are cute, but I would not go to the extent of "wanting her" now.  Probably will work with a comedy video. 

the song made me laugh kinda funny but it does not sound bad.
Like i said it put a smile on my face.

I'm seen some pretty hot women at the supermarket... But they're usually shopping, not working, but there are a few. This is kind of like a spoof song though? With the vox, and the presentation? :-) It was funny though.

The link times out before I can get on the page, but I did hear this a few days ago. The song is pretty entertaining for sure.

bandontherun19


I'm seen some pretty hot women at the supermarket... But they're usually shopping, not working, but there are a few. 

Hot chicks and ugly chicks and all in between: one thing that is common: they all have to eat!

I could have sworn I critiqued this before (in another life time).

Outlandish and atrocious acid rock, not for the kids.

Song structure works extremely well (10/10), but my heart seems to much prefer G-audience lyrics ... since my dark side gets easily invoked with repeated listening.

Awesome...listened to it twice.

Wouldn't change a thing.

People don't understand that this song is an intense semiotic analysis of the modern commercialization of human relations.  Either that or it is about a hot chick at a cash register...either way it works.

JR

You know Ben, when you equate working for a living to prostituting yourself... it reveals a sort of dis attached ivory tower attitude that some people might consider disgusting and repulsive.

It is unclear to me whether that is the intended message of the song... or merely how this expression of your art is playing out.

Just saying.

best regards,
mike

Sorry I missed your post earlier...


...I just got home from work.

:-)


best,
mike

Hey Rimshot, thanks for the compliment, I'm not use to compliments as for more tracks well I have many and many I still haven't put up, I don't want to swamp people so I put up new tracks three or four weeks but because you have requested some new tracks I will put up a new track and I will post a couple of links for you as well.  This one is a cover of the Pogues track Tuesday Morning it was recorded at the start of the year, the only prob with this track is the tom's rattle slightly or they make cheap speakers rattle, I have been meaning to fix it but I am bored with the track so I have given up. 

The track it's self is quite interesting and different, rather than being what you would expect being a Pogues cover, it instead is a sort of pop dance cross, Alice sings lead on this one too so something different: http://soundcloud.com/aaudiomystiks/tuesdaymorning

My best track (in terms of mixing and mastering) and you may have heard this is my cover of the John Lennon track Now and Then: http://soundcloud.com/aaudiomystiks/nowandthen

Also have a try and listen to the track Eat****&Die, I cant post a link to that one because of the **** in the title but you will find it on my Soundcloud page, this track doesn't have anything offensive in it, it's just the title, this track is an attempt at a Pink Floyd type track circa 68-70, so more Space Rock than Prog Rock.  I love this track the only problem with it is possibly the drums are a bit one dimensional.

Oh and finally here is a "real" track called Girl.  This track demonstrates that I can record and fix real drums, it's also a good example of mine and Alice's timeing ability, this one was recorded at my audio schools studio.  Alice and I layed down the Wha Rythem guitar (mind you I didn't record the track with the wha effect, I added that later) but Alice and I layed down the rythem guitar and the drums at once, no metronome.  Alice has then recorded the bass and over the years I have fixed and finished the track but when I handed the track in for marking in 2008 I got 82% for it but I was never happy with that finished master hence the years it took to finish but this is the final mix/master which I finished at the start of the year. http://soundcloud.com/aaudiomystiks/girl

Enjoy and thanks, Ben

Hi Ben,

Thanks for those links.  I just listened to "Now and Then" and it is very good indeed!  I love the simple arrangement and you really captured the vocal style.  I will check out the others too.  

Rimshot