Survives - Rocke and the Airbornes (Punk Rock Original Song)

Hey, everyone. I made this song between Sunday, 9/16 and Tuesday, 9/18. I'd say it's not too shabby for the time frame! Check it out here:
 
http://soundcloud.com/davdud101/survives 
PLEEEAASE Tell me what you think! I know, the Autotuning/singing is really bad (I haven't upgraded any of my setup thus far, and have no place in my own home which is quite suitable for recording), and yes, the mixing is quite HORRENDOUS... I also have no desktop monitors, so no real way to tell what it was going to sound like besides listening through my sutiod heaphones, a pair of cheap earbuds, and a set of $10 speakers. I do indeed realize that pretty much all the vocals are either very sharp or very flat at some moments... Guess I need to work on my vocals.
 
I performed all the guitar/bass tracks and vocals. The drum track was a little plugin called ShortCircuit 2 with some nice samples.
 
So how does it sound, from a production aspect?
 
Here are the lyrics (some things may be a bit different... these are the original):
 
Long brown hair
Love so rare...

When I look into those eyes
It makes me realize
Just who I really am
Inside
Gaze deep into those eyes
Just freeze, I'm paralyzed,
You're the kinda girl I want
In my life...

Pretty face
Innocent girl...

When I look into those eyes,
You just make me feel alive,
And inside me you just light
A fire that'll never die
And I hope you understand
So just take me by the hand
And we'll travel to a paradise for you and I


Bridge:
And I know we need to be together always
Lets make something that won't die,
Even with life at stake and
even when the days
End...
Let's save them...
You're the kinda girl who really grabs me up- in love
Your the kinda girl I need in my life- because

When I look into those eyes,
They makes my heart fly,
So give us something that survives
They make my heart sing,
hop up-up, and gives me wings
You are quite a precious thing

So every note here I write
Every bar here I sing
I hope you know it's all for you-
The one I need

So give us something that survives
Something lasting though our lives
Something that'll never fall down to the ground
And die
Give us something that endures
Love'll stay with us for sure
Give us something that you want
Give us something good and pure