The Tragedy (with vocals)

Here's "The Tragedy" with vocals.  As I mentioned in another thread, a singer/lyricist had joined my Dreambliss project and he finished laying down the vocal tracks today.  I integrated them into the project and made tons of tweaks, etc.  Please let me know what ya's think of the vocals and how the mix is balanced, etc...
 
Check it out here, it's called "The Tragedy":
http://www.reverbnation.com/dreambliss
 
I've been quite busy lately with non-music stuff, and just recently music stuff... so I'll be trying to get back on here to listen to more stuff. 
 
Lyrics:
Howling wind blows through the room,
the temperature decreases
One of you is leaving soon,
his spirit will be freed.
I am having trouble breathing
I can't hold on for long
But before I leave here
Will you help me save my soul?
With all the best intentions,
I journeyed through the darkness
Into superstition,
out of innocence.
How you left us so afraid of secrets shared beyond the grave...
We see all you are and could have been.
Release your soul into the afterlife?
You decide.
I will not be the one to.

Luke,
Lots of creativity here.  The arrangement is stellar. EVerything is clear in the mix with plenty of punch.  Vocals give a nice contrast to the edge of the music. 
Very nice production.

@mgh – Thanks Mark!  The vox will certainly bring my project to the next level and I’m excited!  Dan, the singer, did a stellar job.  I appreciate your feedback.  I normally wouldn’t have processed the vox as much as I have, but due to the story behind this song, I thought it was fitting.  I’ll check on the verb, though.  It might be a bit too much.
 
@No How – Thanks Rick!  I love the progressive song structure, keeps the song interesting all throughout and I like to trickle things here and there, and make change-ups and even bring back melodies with different instruments but add a slight deviation, etc.  You will notice that type of stuff in my other tracks.  I worked hard at getting the production where it is, so I appreciate the feedback.  The vox really do contrast the music yet fits it brilliantly.  I’m still floored by Dan’s addition!
 
@Guitarpima – Thanks Robert!  I appreciate your feedback.  Perhaps since I know the lyrics so well that I hadn’t noticed the vox might be a bit hard to understand.  I will definitely look into that.  I’m glad you enjoyed this!

Wow...this is great, Luke!  (sorry I'm so late...just getting caught up around here.)  

Amazing how much vocals bring to a piece.  I agree, they're a bit hard to understand, but after a few times through I imagine I'd get them.  Great job here! 

I gave a listen and  there might be too much reverb (I thought I posted already but don't see it !). Perhaps that fits the genre. Here is another link I was listening to this morning from the Songs Forum that is done with a well done vocal track:
 
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=897808

+ + + 1 ---- Rock opera!

Holy Fantastic, Batman!!!

This sounds great!!!!  The vocals are excellent and could stand to come up a bit. The lyrics are getting a bit burried by the mix during the heavy parts.

Definitely a great idea adding vocals to this.  I agree they were a bit difficult to hear at times but so are so many I hear on the radio.  I think that if you work on the vocal mix a bit it might help.  I don't do enough production work to help there.  HOWEVER, that having been said, I really liked it and it's a captivating tune.  Unlike my parner CLEAN, I do like dark side stuff.  This didn't get over that far to me but after all, he's CLEAN, OF THE LIGHT SIDE.  LOL  All in all, this is a very good song.

Luke, this is excellent, great vocals really put the icing on this cake. I might back off the delay in the verses, maybe automate it to hit on the last line each time but that's a personal pref, the whole thing sounds very good as is.

Wow! Impressive! Great song and good vocals.

The delays and everything happening there makes it sound a little more busy than neccesary and is a little distracting to me. But some tweaks and this could be on MTV!!! Really good stuff. Great work on the guitars and drums. Sounds perfect!

Philip


Spectacular groanings of surreal hope!  Racing thoughts and ponderings with the inevitable: "Will you help me save my soul?"

IMHO, this is a wise and meaningful tribute to 'our souls' ... the haunting tragedy that lurks and must be dealt with 'one another' ... almost daily it seems.

This is Dan - I just wanted to say thank you for listening to the lyrics and understanding the content.  I owe the conceptual inspiration to Luke, but the reason I have pursued music is to share my musings on mortality and our favorite existential questions and I greatly appreciate that you were able to emote with them in the way that I intended.  Luke has provided a brilliant backdrop musically and conceptually for me to ponder over top of and relay the things I've realized thus far during my existence.

I greatly appreciate all of the feedback, and thank you all for listening!

Killer production & performances... wow... Reverb Nation never sounded so good...

The skill at which you mixed this production was very inspiring. I like the effects on the vocals I just wanted to understand some of the words a little better. Probably just a minor tweak to keep the same effect. Great job!

I didn't like the stocatto vocals in the very beginning, but when the legato part started I was like....oh yes. Very nice.

I definitely like the characteristics of the vocal. This is cool. Something I could easily listen to more than once.