(UPDATED)Remixed and Mastered before sending out

The song is Called Hey Girl. Its the 2nd one on my song list at http://www.soundclick.com/charlesj
Im playing all the instruments (Bass, Guitar, Drums, and synths/keys) and my co-workers son is singing Lead vocal. I just want/need some opinions before i send it to the publishers.
Thanx,
Cj

I just updated it with some of the suggestions i recieved here. I also edited the beginning vocal part a bit.
Cj

Cj, as long as I've been up here, well not as long as most of you guys, I haven't seen you post a song. I listen on your page quite a few times. I even PM'd you once. BTW, you didn't answer. Now to the meat. Your soundclick isn't loading for me! I am looking forward to hearing it. I'll keep trying. Well, I can't open any soundclick pages so it must be them!

CJ doesn't comment on other peoples music "very often" ;-) And you're lucky if he'll answer you... It's a shame too, because he has much knowledge.

The Mix sounds fantastic to me CJ. As much as i try, i can't get my songs to sound as good as this.

great stuff

Mark.

Major distortion on the file CJ, can't listen to it, sorry.

What can I say. I hate that small PM file. I appreciate you trying to answer and I do understand not rewriting that much. Anyway, as always your skills are high!! Mix is clean. There are other songs of yours that i like better (songs themselves) but I do like this one. I'm just at the lead part and I really like that! I would say send it. I'm glad the link is fixed. I can't get over the clean vox at the end. Very nice! That's not your mate singing there is it? Just kidding!

Charles:

As usual, your recording is superb and your mixes are to die for. The intro is outstanding. Playing is top notch, and the tune is really cool and lowdown.

FWIW: I appreciate the genre mash-up you are going for. But the vocals I just am not getting. And it is not the mix, it is the performance. After listening hard three times I wish I could put my finger on it. Ex:"i wanna be wit chu" answer in the chorus sounds like you are out of breath. Maybe it is the juxtaposition of the pro-sounding recording against the kinda-lazy-hiphop style vocals that just aren't up to the same level. And I have heard enough of your stuff to know you can crank out the pro sounding vox.

Hey Girl sounds very distorted. The other songs sound good, though.

NO distortion (Listened to it on speakers and headphones)

The guitars and drums kicks butt! Holds the song together, a perfectly solid foundation.

The bass is great although it could be a little clearer, but there's nice grungy tone in there that just holds it in the mix but it IMHO the sound can be tightened up a bit.

The vocals are fine but sounds a bit phase'y (sort of chorus'y tone), actually I have the same thing going on with a song I just did recently where the harmony vocal tracks sounds too phase'y and for other reasons (mic placement, technique) I'm gonna have to re-do my vocal tracks again

Here's a suggestion you may or may not want to try with lead vocals: Rec another track add a bit of aggressive character to it a little grunge (throat sound), I did that with my song: "Spirit in You" but for my purpose I did it in a more subtle way and you can hardly notice the double-take is there because it's a very tight performance (no audio-snap used) and blended the levels (between the two lead vox tracks) in such a way it adds to the overall vocal tone and gives it a little more depth without sounding like it's double tracked!! (but it's got to be a really tight-performance). The reason why I suggest this technique is because your song "Hey Girl" has that alternative grunge-sound about it (powerful guitars, rock solid drumming). It's a really cool song. Well done.

Anyway it's your song and it's pretty darn good as is, I think it's one of your best. Good luck! Hope you get that publishing deal.

HEY CJ-

well, i'm getting the same weird thing on "Hey Girl"


it's as if the feed is distorting, not the file, because it sounds clean beneath the god awful line of distortion.

maybe it's an encoding thing with soundclick, i don't know, i have a soundclick account as well, and i hate it.

the player is ass.


hey, you could try a YOUSENDIT for downloads, if you don't mind giving away a mp3.....
then you could encode it as high as you want (i use 320kbps) and it'll sound wonderful...
just an idea.

James, im going to re-up it right now
Cj

Its re-uploaded. I hope that works. More suggestion are needed and welcomed, as im working on the final final final master of it... Thanx
Dave, Ill check it out for sure...
Cj

ORIGINAL: CJaysMusic

Its re-uploaded. I hope that works. More suggestion are needed and welcomed, as im working on the final final final master of it... Thanx
Dave, Ill check it out for sure...
Cj

In the past I had the same issue with Soundclick.com on my song, I also noticed this happened to someone else. The strangest thing is some people reported no problems yet others had problems and I never found the cause, a re-upload solved it.

Anyway! I already posted a reply/suggestions to your song (see page one), there was no distortion on the first upload and this upload sounds fine too. Not bad at all for an upload, re-upload, uploaded again final final final final finally finished master

Post edit:
Oh and another thing..... I've got to remember to turn off the Echo whilst posting on these forums forums forums, there seems to be an echo, echo, echo thingy thingy going on here here here