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munmun
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2009/04/06 21:52:50 (permalink)

Vision of you

Would love some feedback on these lyrics. Feeling stuck...

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When I stop and look at my life
Things aren't gonna get any better
The world has disappointed me oh so bad
This nightmare's really down to the letter

Chrous
I want to feel a touch that's real
That lets me feel just how I want to feel
All I want in my life is a vision of you

Verse
I've come to trust few with my life
But they approach me with glistening knives
The walls are closing in on me oh so tight
They'll get me in the dead of the night

Chorus
I want to sweep away the pain
Wash away these thoughts in the falling rain
All I want in my life is a vision of you.

Middle
I'm falling, falling, falling so hard
The hour is drawing when I will need out

All I want in my life is a vision of you

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    lackluster strumming
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    RE: Vision of you 2009/04/06 22:42:48 (permalink)
    What style of song is it? do you already have a music ect...

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    Blurick
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    RE: Vision of you 2009/04/07 01:41:02 (permalink)
    kinda hard to judge lyrics without the music context for me. Personally I think words are somewhat overrated. I mean if there's a good groove, mix, and performance, then I really don't mind if every other line is "I like to eat rabbit pellets". If the tune is good, I'll like it and even sing along lol.



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    munmun
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    RE: Vision of you 2009/04/07 04:53:23 (permalink)
    I do. Think indie rock crossed with the Beatles. Fast tempo guitar driven.
    ORIGINAL: lackluster strumming

    What style of song is it? do you already have a music ect...


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    Johannes H
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    RE: Vision of you 2009/04/07 05:56:58 (permalink)
    Hi munmun!

    I think you have expressed what many people feel, to me that`s a good thing!

    Best, JH


                   
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    foxwolfen
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    RE: Vision of you 2009/04/07 08:04:52 (permalink)

    ORIGINAL: munmun

    I do. Think indie rock crossed with the Beatles. Fast tempo guitar driven.
    ORIGINAL: lackluster strumming

    What style of song is it? do you already have a music ect...



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