MGH: I was using inferior (non-condensor) mics and destructive-editting on this last year. Thanks for the 2nd crit; 'means an aweful lot to me. Hopefully, I'll redo the vox-chain entirely (in a month or so) and clarify a bit.

Larry: Thanks for validation and encouragement. I appreciated the Beatles in their later hippie-stuff.

Rick: Hopefully I'll seriously focus on the bass line, my next immediate step ... and lowering the interfering arpeggiation.

SpaceDuck: I think I got in over my head and forgot to reconcile the bass line which remains murky. (*Someone* dropped it 2 dcbs during the *clipping fiasco* and forgot to re-adjust it)

there are parts which might benefit from some good old fashioned woof. You could do this with EQ, or you could simply double the bass with a lower octave (but really quiet, because I like the bass line where it is)

SD, I subconsciously love a full-driving arpeggio bass line with woof, thanks immensely for validating this construct and giving me technical ideas to start with.
Bass-lines seem so sublime and vital for every mix … even without the lower rumble. Don’t let me forget their necessity in every mix.

Mark

: Excellent crit. Thank you (immensely). You noted the emotive dissonance of the vox, which is difficult to reconcile with busy-ness, multi-counterpoints, frenetics, etc, which are obvious pasted-ins. The lyrics (written 20+ years ago) seemed originally way too boring and melancholic for repeated listening (by myself and others) ... way before home-recording became real. Also, my vocals do still lack both emotive and emotional punch (at present). But methinks groaning melancholy must give way to groaning hope and orchestration with "a little strength that remains".

In sum: Awaiting some vox clarity, piano adjustments, and a stronger bass line.

Hi Philip,

I agree, this does sound excellent now - all the instrumentation sounds well placed in the mix. The bass lines really caught my attention - well defined in the mix and well played - I love the tone.

My only crit, maybe add a bit of vocal doubling (which I have an affinity for) at various points, maybe when you sing 'Wait for Thee Lord'- or maybe try a subtle harmony vox there - JMO.

The lead vocal does sound much more defined in this mix.

Cheers,
Doug

Much better.... I really enjoy this tune. Keep them coming, GREAT JOB!

LOL (Nice Avatar)

Thanks Thal for the crit ...

I just read about poor Sid on Wikipedia; some of my kin (Floyd fans, somewhat) seem to have suffered similar mental illness. I'm still here, to the best of my knowledge.

Thanks Steve for going gentle on me.

'Looking forward to hearing more of your stuff and learning.