You Better Move In (Aug. 8th)

For better or for worse, here's a song called "You Better Move In." I hope you like it (at least it's shorter than the others!)
https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445
 
LJ

Hi  eph221, 
Thanks for listening! She's crying because she's overworked and all she wants to do is live with you! :)

Usually when I listen to people's songs here, I can hear which musician had influenced them (at least I think I do).
Your music is so original tho that I can't think of anyone much similar except maybe Kate Bush?
Anyway, I really liked this song. Nicely harmonized vocal and a really cool foot stomping bass line.  I wasn't sure about the hand clapping at first, but you varied it enough to make it interesting.

this song is all about the vocals and bass. at least in this mix. the drums are very much in the background,which I suspect is cos they are a very modern sounding kit which wouldn't necessairly fit with this track. the way you track your vocals with the the old widening delay effect is so fantastic but that does take up a lot of sonic space. the mix overall sounds quite narrow in the main i think cos the centre vocal and bass are so up in the mix, and the vocal is very close. another great tune of course. i'd try to somehow let the mix breathe a little, maybe a bit more verb on the vocal and widen the guitars a little, bring up the drums...what do I know?

I tried to take your advice, and here is the result:
 
[https://soundcloud.com/la...ove-in-junlectric-2016] 
 
New link:
 https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445/you-better-move-in-june-2016-g
 https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445/you-better-move-in-july-2016-h
https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445
 LJ

Laura does electric guitar!  
 
Like your previous songs it's so non-typical in chord progression, arrangement and melody. And yet it still manages to sound just like you.   It's got the LJ stamp for sure. 
 

teh mix balance is much better in this one. Unfortunately the electric guitar is over-gained and a bit crunchy which doesn't quite gel with the rest. i think dcumpian is right, it's mix compression which is affecting the guitar as well as the cymbals at times. but as a whole mix to me this sounds much better.

Just listening to the mix you-better-move-in-june-2016-g sounds the best one I have heard yet much more balance.

Ditto... overall it just sounds "cleaner" and each element seems better defined within the mix. 

Thanks, stevec ! I've been really enjoying listening to your song, Ver Tudo. I'm proudly responsible for several of your "listens" on SoundCloud.
 
ABull, you do say the nicest things!  The only thing that could be better would be to hear you sing them with your lovely tone and great vibrato.
 

Thanks for the repeat listen, Allan :) . Sometimes I wonder if I should try to be less quirky!

Hi, Kenny! There aren't any finger bells or triangles, so I'm not sure what you mean, unless it's clapping? There's also a note that I'm repeating quickly on acoustic guitar at that point and variations on that throughout - maybe that's it? I'm sorry if it's annoying you - maybe it wasn't the best idea.
LJ

I'm sorry, Kenny. Your ears and/or speakers are likely much better than mine, because I can't hear what you mean.  :(

ABull
Hey Laura, you're one of the better singer/songwriters to ever grace this forum.  Please, please don't be lured into worrying about every little nit here and there that others will point out (of course, unless it's something that's impeding the demo's ability to present your song).  It always reminds me of the old saying  "Other than that, Mrs. Lincoln, how did you like the play?"
 
Your demos sound more than fine and allow listeners access to your unique artistry. :)
 
Allan
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here, here!  Which brings up one of the essential elements of great songwriting:  empathy.  AND,  how do you get thick skin while at the same time actually caring about others!  It's a catch 22.  Keep creating, please!  Additionally,  if a composition is compelling what difference does the fidelity make  (as long as it's within reason)?  :D:D

Hi again Kenny,
 
I'm embarrassed and confused that I can't identify the irritating sound you mean, but I never thought that you were attacking me, just that I was a dumbbell for not being able to figure out what you were referring to!
 
You were the one who talked me into having the nerve to post here in the first place, and for that and for your continued support I will always be truly grateful - it's been a giant step for me and I'm still floundering in many ways while I struggle to adjust to the idea that anybody besides me would ever listen to or even want to listen to anything I do.
 
Allan (ABull), your support and encouragement has also been fantastic and very, very much appreciated. Like you say, having a songwriter who knows what he's doing on your side can be wonderfully uplifting. Sometimes I think you must have ESP because your comments come so close to replying to my thoughts.
 
eph221, speaking of perceptive comments, your reply a few posts ago was an incredibly sensitive and kind one .... you seem to be a very good soul.
 
I know I haven't done anything to deserve to have such nice people take the time to comment here on this thread, but I do know how lucky I am that you did.  I also know how much pleasure I get from listening to your music, each one of you. SO much talent floating around here - it's really something special. That may seem facile, but it's true. 
 
LJ