an experimental piece in 10/8 time sig

I liked the bass arpeggio and I admire the well crafted lyrics.

The guitar solo seemed fresh and original... I dug the harmonies it revealed.


best regards,
mike

As I'm geared toward more songwriting (ldo) I don't understand why you don't take those lyrics and put them in an understandable form.  Honestly, without the written lyric, nifty lines like these -- all the things I never did became the life I never lived -- would be lost in that recording. 
 
Given that, I like the sound of this and I think you're achieving here what many of the self-proclaimed avant garde "artists" on this forum think they're accomplishing.
 
I'd like to hear those lyrics in a song, so sue me
 
Allan
www.youtube.com/user/Kittibutt
 

hey thanks Mike, Marius, Allan & Lynn.  I concur about the discernability of the lyrics, and you all make valid points; I think I have listened to too many early REM albums, Radiohead and Nirvana ;p - to me, when one has to read the lyrics to understand them, it kinda draws the listener in more, making them more involved in the artistic process.  Getting a song like this on the radio will never happen, and is not necessarily a concern of mine, especially in the weird alien 'experimental' format this opus lives in.  Perhaps the obscurity also helps dampen the personal relationship i have to the lyrics as well, leaving their interpretation open for a more 'customization' of understanding for the listener and their own life & experiences.  For as to me, the lyrics kinda span a lifetime of things that have made/broken me eg my Jesuit education, my marriage ending with my wife's tragic accident, her coma/amnesia/ensuing physical-mental handicap, my spinal cord injury and pain that i live with every day, my spiritual atheism, anomie, nihilism, suicide attempts, drug overdoses, living on the street and in basements of abandoned buildings, jail, being pronounced dead, alien abduction dreams, bipolar vicissitudes, and everything and anything in between.

pistolpete


Basically what I heard was a few minutes of screechy noise. There is a reason why people don't use 10/8. This is one of them. A brief history lesson ... Avant garde can be translated from French as meaning horrible crap. It's literal meaning is "advance guard" because this is going to stink.

;p ça m'est égal lol.... bien faire et laisser dire ... il est ce qu'il est

Tough call on whether I like it or not. 

It is your vision and I commend you for that.

However, since you purposely called it experimental I'd say that if I was in the band I'd have suggested a dramatic change up in the "middle".

I like this song. It's really cool and different. Like Alice in Chains on an acid trip.

Everything is cool but the lyrics could be made to be understood better.

Well done!!!

Guitarpima


I like this song. It's really cool and different. Like Alice in Chains on an acid trip.

AIC on acid lol - luv it

Purple Rhapsody


This is cool from a technical perspective but perhaps you should have gone for 11/8 or even something weirder like 3 bars of 11/8 and then a bar of 14/8... ;-) I always envy the skill of people who manage to pull off that kind of thing without it sounding off kilter. 

Cheers, 
Terry. 

i hear ya; it drones a bit but more on purpose contrasted against the other textures. working on something in 19/8 in fact.

I like the time sig but you could have just as easily used 5/4 LOL. Anyway I think there are some good ideas in here. If it were me I would try some different instrumentation and pull the distortion way back and the vocals forward. Also as Bapu mentioned a change in the middle would meak a big difference. Perhaps even change the time sig to 7/8 and then back to 10/8. You have the makings of something cool here I think.

Purple Rhapsody

Tom Riggs


I like the time sig but you could have just as easily used 5/4 LOL. 

I thought the same initially but then realised that it really depends on where the beat is. I mean 3/4 and 6/8 are mathematically the same but the beats are in a different place. Traditionally in 5/4 you'd put the emphasis on beats 1 and 4 - I haven't listened back yet (and I'm at work so can't until later) but where is the emphasis in this one?


Cheers,
Terry.

true. 5/4 and 10/8 are mathematically equivalent, but since the guitar pattern is playing 10 8th notes, and the main downbeat comes on the 5, it seemed more logical to deem it 10/8.  the 1st measure in intro where the guitar starts (after the 'we will contact you shortly' words) is a pick-up on last 2 8th notes.  

also i hear what people are saying about the overly-distorted drums, but i'm worried if i attenuate them down it will take the 'weirdness' out of the mix. this is more supposed to be a Dada-esque piece, like Duchamp's "Fountain" lol  it will never be on the radio ;p more towards the spirit of Luigi Russolo/Noise Music etc. - but maybe i'll tame the distortion down a tad to make it less jarring. the drums are actually acoustic drums w/ distortion.....heavy gate on kick & snare

lol just realized now that i mentioned Duchamp i'm sure pistol pete will talk about this being a good tune to pee on ;p