I like this one. Well done. I believe it could use l little more space. Not rich reverb, maybe a short plate in addition to the verb. It's how I like to work sometimes and I understand it might not fly for you.
 
The vocal might be slightly too up front.Not much.

Jesse
The vocal and accompaniment parts seemed to balance well to my ears. Nice melody too. Velva has a unique voice which is quite pleasing but it seemed like inflections were off here and there. Probably a style thing I suppose.  
Something going on with the drums (?) around 1:10. Little distracting but no biggie.

All in all I enjoyed the listen.

I've listened to a couple of your songs in the past but didn't comment on them because I don't get what it is you're doing. Gonna try to have an open mind though. So I'll just pop down to the next page and listen to that Born with a Gun in My Hand song...

kennywtelejazz
OK Jesse , She is good as a singer , but she also needs to learn how to serve the song
She did a nice 2 verses but her first half of the chorus? was very weak .
Also she gets very pitch'y on most of the last held notes of a phrase ...
She is only on about 65 % of the time in the  song IMHO ...whether she thinks it or not She Can Do Better
Now if you decide that she gets to run the show fine ...
I suspect she may not even be aware of most of what I have just mentioned
If this is what you have to work with you still have a lot ...I feel Kevin is right ..she is way to loud for the track.
You need to reel her in for the songs mix to sound good .
You have nice musical parts taking place through out  the song , I feel some of them can be mixed and highlighted and accentuated more ...It would tighten up the arrangement of the song and make it more cohesive ...
BTW, After your held synth notes at the very end of the song you left an extra min of blank space ...
 
anyway I'm not looking to be critical here it may sound that way to you but I'm not ...
I have a long standing rule that if anything annoys me for any reason in any song that I do it needs to be addressed before the song moves on  ...every so often something may slip through and I may not catch it ...
A big reason why I use a SoundCloud paid acct ...to put up a new mix and not loose the links and listens ...
 
For the record I do think your song is pretty nice . I prefer this to a lot of your other music ...
I hope this singer will bend a little bit for you ...You 2 do sound very good together...it may just be growing pains
 
all the best,
 
Kenny

Kenny
 
I showed Velva your comments,
 
At first she was like "what, 65% is a D!"
 
But when I showed her some of your other posts, she was like "OK, I get it."
 
She said you sound like a boy who needs a real big hug, a hot muffin, some breathing exercises, and time out.
 
Velva did say your puppy was adorable.
 
then we laughed and started singing.
 
she'll probably never record with me again.
 
JQS
 
 
 

That's a shame, you two sound great together. Kenny's comments were quite constructive and on point. He heard things I certainly didn't and during a subsequent listen they popped out immediately once Kenny made me aware of them. I agree with him that additional work can make this really something special. Maybe after some reflection she'll reconsider.