Trying to imagine the exact character I see for this piece. You aimed for charismatic rogue - but for me personally, you hit more in the area of a princess, maybe a queen... someone high up in the leadership chain. That's at least what I first visualize.
I can definitely say you may pretty good use of the primary theme. Doesn't sound like much emphasis was placed on editing for realism, but strings themselves are a good choice depending on who (which character type) you're writing for.