stevec
Nice one...   Great vibe happening, slightly dark and cinematic.    If this is the closest you've come to writing a song, I think you need to write more songs.  

I'm certainly no expert on the genre, but I think he meant "Love Song"......

Ken, I had to listen to this song a few times.  Mainly, because I like the song, but also because I thought it was cluttered and the vocals seem to be drowned out by the toms.  You can easily open up this mix by panning the guitars and drums wider.  On second and third listens, I noticed that there's a lot of stuff going on in the center of the mix, and though stereo, the mix seemed narrow to me.  Panning would open up space for the lead vocal, and perhaps, lend a little bit of dynamics to the mix.  All in all, this is a song worth the extra bit of effort to make it shine, and is a gem waiting to happen.

Mesh

stevec
Nice one...   Great vibe happening, slightly dark and cinematic.    If this is the closest you've come to writing a song, I think you need to write more songs.  

I'm certainly no expert on the genre, but I think he meant "Love Song"......

Crap...   where is that Homer Simpson "DOH!" emoticon...   
 

That's quite a well-written tune. Pretty epic death ballad!!!
 
I listened on headphones and the mix was decent but I'd look at the hi hats, they were panned far right? And kind of distorting or breaking up? In a complicated song like this, it just takes a while to perfect things. Maybe some timing issues with the drums could use attention.
 
However, this song is soooo worth the time. Nice job, will check back to hear it after you've lacquered it up a tad. All the bones are there.
 
cheers,
-Tom

Wookiee
Listened to this when you first posted the mix sounded messy which struck me as not you or Mesh.

Not sure what remix this is but it sounds better than the first one.

Thanks for listening, John. The first upload was a mistake..
The second one was the version I was supposed to upload the first time.
Still have some work to do.
All the best.

stevec
Nice one...   Great vibe happening, slightly dark and cinematic.    If this is the closest you've come to writing a song, I think you need to write more songs.  

Thanks, Steve.
My wife often describes my music as you did 
As corrected a few posts up. It's the closest I've come to write a love song
All the best.

Lynn
Ken, I had to listen to this song a few times.  Mainly, because I like the song, but also because I thought it was cluttered and the vocals seem to be drowned out by the toms.  You can easily open up this mix by panning the guitars and drums wider.  On second and third listens, I noticed that there's a lot of stuff going on in the center of the mix, and though stereo, the mix seemed narrow to me.  Panning would open up space for the lead vocal, and perhaps, lend a little bit of dynamics to the mix.  All in all, this is a song worth the extra bit of effort to make it shine, and is a gem waiting to happen.

Thanks for listening and positive feedback, Lynn.
I know the mix is cluttered in the middle. Some part of it is due to me "doing the choirs myself", and not finding proper place for them. And the drums needs some work. 
I'll also try to separate the guitars more.
All the best.

emeraldsoul
That's quite a well-written tune. Pretty epic death ballad!!!
 
I listened on headphones and the mix was decent but I'd look at the hi hats, they were panned far right? And kind of distorting or breaking up? In a complicated song like this, it just takes a while to perfect things. Maybe some timing issues with the drums could use attention.
 
However, this song is soooo worth the time. Nice job, will check back to hear it after you've lacquered it up a tad. All the bones are there.
 
cheers,
-Tom

Thanks for the cool feedback, Tom.
I'm going to do some more work on the drums, all together. (I think the snare is off some places as well..)
I just joined the EW Composer Cloud, so I'm also going to replace all the "choirs", strings, and wood / brass with better sounding tools. Hope that will help.
All the best.

Really nice tune, Ken.  I think the mix still needs some work, but you've had so many comments on that I'm not sure I can add anything truly constructive.

philz
Really nice tune, Ken.  I think the mix still needs some work, but you've had so many comments on that I'm not sure I can add anything truly constructive.

Thanks for listening, Phil.
I agree. It still needs some work.
All the best.