Orbus is a song about orphans and is dedicated in memory of Sacred Heart Home. Original release date was April 4 2016 and has since been fitted with a new drum track and other modifications. Have a listen and feel free to comment.
 
Dean.
1st version
https://soundcloud.com/user-381818354/orbus
 
 2nd version
https://soundcloud.com/us...818354/orbus-fec-2-d-2

Excellent stuff this, you really play with feeling! Love the effects on the vocals. And ordinarily I'd suggest bringing that bass down a tad, but since it's such a sparing bass part you get away with it and it really adds weight to the track and drives it along. 

sharke
Excellent stuff...

Thanks a bunch James. I'm still working this one out and not totally happy with the drums. I get a little closer each time I go at it. I think I have to bring the kick up a bit more on these mixes of mine. I'm a little shy on the bottom end with the drum kick and my ear is trying to make up for it with the bass.

Lots of good work here....would like to hear the vox a bit more separated as they seems to compete for the same space at times....also I would like to hear the lead in the into come up a bit. 
 
Nice emotional ride! 

thepogue
Lots of good work here....would like to hear the vox a bit more separated as they seems to compete for the same space at times....also I would like to hear the lead in the into come up a bit. 
 
Nice emotional ride! 

Thanks thepogue. Which version, 1 or 2?  Really just working on getting the drum track established. The first attempt was a bit quirky. I think this one hits everything much better.  Nevertheless, I'll remember your suggestions when I get this drum work all squared away.
 
Here is the last mix 
https://soundcloud.com/us...818354/orbus-fec-2-d-2
 
Your review was sincerely appreciated. Thanks!
 
Dean

Couldn't access the 2nd mix??

thepogue
Couldn't access the 2nd mix??

My mistake. It's now public. 
 
https://soundcloud.com/user-381818354/fec-2-d-2
 
 

Hiya Dean,
 
I like both versions, of course, but the second mix pulls out in front, just a tad
 
cheers
 
andy

Both mixes work I think it depends on what you want to be the most forward, thanks for sharing.

synkrotron
Hiya Dean,
 
I like both versions, of course, but the second mix pulls out in front, just a tad
 
cheers
 
andy

Wookiee
Both mixes work I think it depends on what you want to be the most forward, thanks for sharing.

Andy and Wookie, thanks for the input. The thing that is irritating me the most at this moment is the drum track. I don't think I'm catching the feel of this entirely. Also, the bass is perhaps a bit sparse. Still experimenting with it. Thanks for the review!
Dean