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This was a song my daughter wrote. Let us know what you think and where it could use improvements. Thanks
 
The one with the photo cover is the demo we made and the top one was the final product

Pretty good. The only critique I can offer is maybe a little less reverb on backing synth. Nevertheless, I like the tune. 

That is one bad ass mix!
 
Really well done track, and the song is very good and contemporary. Your daughter has a great voice for this style.
 
Regards,
Dan

Listened to both takes whilst the mix is reasonable on both, they have a little to much reverb for my taste.  The vocal on the Alternate rock version needs the top end taming as I can imagine it will become very tiring on the ears.  Could be the MP3 conversion but it just sounds like they need softening as they are harsh on my furry ears.

Good tune and she can certainly sing, thanks for sharing. 

I really enjoyed this pop tune....very very nice work all the way round! Great vox and super supporting music.....great mix!
 
Shes super!!!
 
A++