It's called Mythical Sunshine and if you live anywhere where it stays cloudy and/or rains for five months in a row, you'll know why.
 
What does it need? What can I do? What needs re-doing? Is the bass too loud? Thanks for your ears . . .
 
 
Begun in 2010
file corrupted and computer died 2013
(managed to save some mixdowns and parts)
reassembly begins 2014
here we are, is it 2017 already???
 
https://soundcloud.com/songsbytom-com/mythical-sunshine
 
 
 
Mythical Sunshine
I think I saw you long ago
was it a memory or a dream
overcast haunts me
I look for a happiness unknown
in this grey, unchanging scene
 
I know I'm not the only one
who finds this gloominess a trial
and if I'd never seen the sun
a lighter grey might make me smile
 
what has it taught me
has the eternal end begun
another symptom of my disease
and if you brought me
brought me a single ray of sun
it would bring me to my knees
 
and to the sunless, leaden sky
I speak a curse into the wind
nobody knows it's there but I
I can't make the sunlight shine again  
 
etc, etc.
 

The song had quite an adventure then. I believe you have a great song here. All sounded right.

I like the structure and progression of it, good mood too.  The drums come in real nice right there, very cool.  The criticism is the vocal work.  It's fairly shaky in the beginning, a little pitchy on those first couple of lines.  After that, it was hard not to hear the imperfection of pitch.  Good song, in my opinion, just would retouch that vocal stuff to make sure you're getting good pitch and texture.  
 
 

This Sunshine you sing of Tom what is it?

I like the song but the reverb in the opening was a little over cooked, I know somewhat intentional but still OTT for me.  A few tweaks here there should bring it into shape Tom, will keep the furry ears open for those touches. 

What does this need?
 
It needs some music mogul to stumble over it and drops some pennies to post it on his immense twitter feed.
 
Best song ever!
 
mofo
 
6:10, that guitar, holy mollie.
 
Now, this begs the question.  What do you need?  You need some serious glue.  Your tentacles have probed into the root tapped.
 
ashes to ashes, dust to dust, soul to soul, morning to night, dig.
 
96 proof in the speak easy boy.
 
Q. the Screed Jesse!
 
 

I know I say this a lot, but I ain't qualified to comment on the mix.
 
Song, though, is great
 
So well written and performed.
 
Standout bits for me where the doubled vocals... I think that worked very well indeed
 
Nice work Tom

Kakku, thanks for the listen!
 
Voda la Void, thanks for the comments on the vocals, I'll give them another look. That's my achillies heel. More of an achilles leg.
 
Wookiee, thanks for the comments! I agree the initial reverb is over-ponderous. It's also baked into the cake, I'm afraid, from audio files and mix decisions made 8 years ago! I could easily chop the whole beginning off, and save everybody two minutes . . . hmmm . . .
 
Jesse Q, you are great as usual. I'll look up what that thing called "Twitter" is. It's a pet, isn't it? I might get one myself, but I hear they need feeding a lot. And it comes with 144 characters, which I'm not sure, I already have enough characters in my life. Oh, and thanks for the listen and the cool comments.
 
Andy, thanks glad you liked it. 
 
-Tom
 
 

Interesting song, Tom.   I kinda' liked it, though honestly not my favorite of what I've heard of your tunes (that honor would go to Apricot).  I did think the bass was a bit too loud, though the bass line was so good I sorta' didn't mind.  

emeraldsoul
 
if you live anywhere where it stays cloudy and/or rains for five months in a row
 

 
Yes...I'm in Scotland...
 
Excellent song Tom, loads of little bits of ear candy going on, cool chord progressions too. Very good writing and production.

Tom,
 
This track has so many really good things in it. The vocal issues Voda pointed out are not quite as prominent, to me. I can hear them, but they don't overtly detract from the song. The double tracking cures a lot of it. Love the EP/wurly/JD800 breakdown...so smoove.
 
Really enjoyed this! Congrats!
 
Dan