I'll jump in . . . I do like the electronic-influenced elements, and that straight piano section works nicely. It's a pleasant tune about I guess a bummer subject. Hope you can jump someday.
For a thought, you might look at the very-consistent volume of the snare. Perhaps vary the midi value from time to time. You might look at throwing in a few more drum fills towards the end of the sections.
It has a throwback vibe, nice job!
cheers,
-Tom