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  • The Elephant in the Room (p.2)
3/24/2017
Jesse Screed
The best thing about this song is the honesty.
 
I can tell that you are a person of introspection, and I think that is a good thing.  Reflection is good.
 
Sure, there a things you might do to tweak it, but for raw truth, and concrete realization, you nailed it.
 
It is you,
 
I say, one of the best tunes I have heard on the forum... ever.  I mean that too.
 
naked soul exposed for the willing
 
Everything's going to be alright, you're moving in the affirmative direction.
 
Jesse Q. Screed
3/25/2017
Beagle
Jesse Screed
The best thing about this song is the honesty.
 
I can tell that you are a person of introspection, and I think that is a good thing.  Reflection is good.
 
Sure, there a things you might do to tweak it, but for raw truth, and concrete realization, you nailed it.
 
It is you,
 
I say, one of the best tunes I have heard on the forum... ever.  I mean that too.
 
naked soul exposed for the willing
 
Everything's going to be alright, you're moving in the affirmative direction.
 
Jesse Q. Screed


^ exactly my thoughts!  
 
honesty, introspection - great stuff there.  keep working!
 
3/28/2017
bjornpdx
Daryl
Thank you. Yeah, the ending on this version is kind of abrupt. I intend to flesh it out more.

Kakku
Thank you!

Jesse
I really appreciate the comments. They brought me out of a bit of a funk.

Beagle
Thanks for the encouragement!
3/28/2017
Wookiee
This has a nice honest feel to the lyrics and the playing, yes a little bit of Mic placement would help the vocals.  One trick you could try is sing over the top of your mic I find that helps one of the singers I record now and again.
3/29/2017
MarkusClinus
Beautiful - well-written and played tune. The vocals are a bit upfront - other than that - this is a real gem.
3/29/2017
Lynn
Bjorn, this is a super song with great 3am lyrics.  I noticed that the reverb sort of highlights the small clicks and pops you're concerned about.  Two ideas; one, cut back on the reverb and go as dry as you can stand, and, two, perhaps try singing through a Shure 57?  Dynamic mics are more forgiving for some singers.  If you used a dynamic mic on this, nevermind.
3/29/2017
jamesg1213
I can identity with those lyrics Bjorn, 2 - 3am is my standard 'wake up & worry' time. Nicely done
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