Lynn
David, this really works for me.  The chord progression and melody are superb, as is the vocalist.  My only suggestion would be to turn her up in the big finale, where the instruments compete with her.  The lyrics shine and need to be heard.  Otherwise, this is a stellar production.  Btw, who is she?

Yes, I know what you mean.  There's some important lyrics there:
 
As it comes to pass
Can't throw it all away
forgive yourself your sins
you know god already has.
 
Thanks for listening Lynn.  BTW I presented this to someone in the Christian market and he said it wasn't *christian enough*.  I thought the various imagery (rise, sins, forgiveness...etc) and the overarching message were very Christian.  Oh well.
 

daryl1968

eph221
Wow, that's quite a compliment Daryl.   I feel really privileged to know her.

Really? I'm a big fan of her and the Crusaders in their own right.

I don't mean her but her...

Like the tune! Great singer and what a voice!

You have a guitar that joins in (acoustic?) In the beginning and it really is not complimentary to the song. My initial reaction was that you you applying some strange tape effect. :/

I like that little bloop, but you're right it might be a non-sequitur. Thanks for listening berlymahn.

 
Good one David. Cool yet warm vocals. Engaging guitars. I liked the way the drums and bass kick off at 1:17 and then rest off at 3:17.
 
 
 

eph221

daryl1968

eph221
Wow, that's quite a compliment Daryl.   I feel really privileged to know her.

Really? I'm a big fan of her and the Crusaders in their own right.

I don't mean her but her...

Ah, got it........ I think

I mean I don't know the crusaders singer, but I feel fortunate to have found Jen.  

Interesting intro, nice modulation, great vocalist

eph221
I mean I don't know the crusaders singer, but I feel fortunate to have found Jen.  

So, you found Jen With Randy Crawford Crusading? Weird

Thank you for listening twisted.  She's an extraordinary talent.