Hello
 
I don't know what to say.
 
I have been away so long.
 
This is my new song.
 
Sure wish I could meet all of you.
 
I need to redo the vocals, right?
 
http://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=13508056&q=hi
 
Jesse Q. Scerrd

Welcome back!
 
Cool tune, has a Roger Waters vibe, but I think the lyrics are better.
 
Vocal performance is great, but it does sound as if you put a bath towel over the microphone. The acoustic guitar could be a little muffled sounding as well, but I'll ask, how are you processing those vocals? Got furry plugins on 'em?
 
The other elements (drums, elec guitar, organ) sound up to the task.
 
looking forward to hearing more!
 
-Tom

Jesse Screed
Hello
 
I don't know what to say.
 
I have been away so long.
 
This is my new song.
 
Sure wish I could meet all of you.
 
I need to redo the vocals, right?
 
http://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=13508056&q=hi
 
Jesse Q. Scerrd

This is perfect as is, jesse.

Nice one Jesse.  Glad to see you back on the forum.  Sounds good and the lyrics great and are a nice match with the lyrics.   Are you using a particular Fx on the vocal.  They have an interesting "fuzzy" effect.

Welcome back
This is really good - don't change a thing

The Screed is back in full form.

Nice track, I wouldn't change anything in respect of arrangement and instrumentation. I will let others more qualified in this style give feedback about the vocals, I personally like the slight muffled tone.

thanks,
 
i used the fuzzy button in the PC.
 
 
it works real well when you want things to be a little fuzzy...not wookie fuzzy....lest you tun the knob to far...but fuzzy fuuzzyy
 
how about those samshers?  Pretty good hey?
 
jqs

Hey, Jesse, sounds like you got a really good tune there.  Bearing in mind that this is just one guy's opinion, I'm hearing two things you may want to look at.  The vocal sounds kind of muffled at points, and also I was getting some low end rumble listening on my pc speakers.  I wouldn't recommend over-producing this tune, but it could stand a little tightening up.  It's a good one though... nice job.

I like it Jesse, maybe the best I've heard from you.