I posted this before, but have now completely reworked the chorus, and the song has been remixed and remastered. 
 
Thanks for listening - I hope you like it and of course, any comment appreciated. 
  
https://soundcloud.com/bi...oin-the-army-version-2
 
 
 
 

I didn't hear the first version so can't comment on the changes. The chorus seems to work well, big lift there. I'd maybe consider starting with a less emphatic guitar sound in the verses (perhaps picked arpeggios), so that you can build the song as it goes along and let the vocals breathe a bit. As it's already mastered, that may be a moot point.

Thanks for listening James. I think your suggestion of building the guitar up is a good one, I may well try that. I'm able to dive back in and change at will as it is self 'mastered'.